Does Athena hold pageants in the skies, every time another moron dies?
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Came up with this line earlier today. I will work it into a longer piece at some point (possibly), but for now, it works well as a one-liner.
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- One Liners by Lj-.
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It does indeed work as a one liner and a very good one at that. This one reminds me of my youth for some reason. I was so sarcastic
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Thank you...I dont think I want to remember what kind of day I was having when I wrote that.
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I like it.
Thank you for entering,
Best of luck.
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Thank you. Against my better judgement, I still think I should expand it into a longer piece at some point lol
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You're welcome.
Lol, let me know if you do.
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Very nice. Almost sounds off-hand - a comment thrown away in an arthouse film, but powerful on it's own.
I don't know if I'd even expand this, it would probably take away from the line itself. (No matter how fantastic the other words are, it would be a case of drowning in too many of them).
Cheers,
=> Jess
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Thanks. It does come across as a quick, throwaway, biting quip. As I was saying to bella-babie, I was unsure how I was going to work it as a longer piece, however, it is more than likely that it was never meant to be so, it was always meant to remain a one-liner.
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Hrm, that's a tough one. I think it's fine just as a one liner. It's powerful enough like that. But if you do expand, i'm sure it will be wonderful
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Thank you. I'm definately going to think about it. It will probably take a while to work around this one.
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It sure does work exceptionally well as a one liner. Great idea! I like it a lot. It's original and makes you think Wonderful!!
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Thank you. It is definately making me think at the moment, thinking how the hell I'm going to expand it.
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