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I Miss My Life

I miss the way everything was ok.
I miss the times when everyone was happy.
I miss it when mom never cried.

I miss it when the world revolved around me.
And not in a concited way.
I want that life back.
The dream life of every young girl.

I miss my life,
I need my life,
I want my life back!

i was in a depressed/confussed mood and i really want to no what people think..

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  • ultimate beluga
    December 15, 2007

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    this is really good, i thought the middle stanza had great flow, sounded really good. great work, though i think you should lose the exclamation mark in the last line. but really good!


  • allfivehorizons
    October 9, 2007

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    Yeah I could feel your depression in this. Very nicely written. The last line of the first paragraph says a lot in itself. if you ever need one to talk to, i'm here. Oh and 'concited' is 'conceited' (spell check!). sorry 'bout that ^_^. keep up the good writing!