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Reaching ---- Falls

A ledge just higher,
a place from which to reach,
going nowhere always moving,
desire a bobbing lantern
in a swamp of life.

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The Pink Flower Falls,
Gliding toward the unknown-
toward its next life

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  • light to a dreamer gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    I would take out some of the third line like all of it from ( from to places ) cause you use the words to many times and it gumbles up there and it is a great piece and would move better all the same a ver nice job