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Falling for you.

Now your gone; with your pictures on the wall; Man, for you, did I fall?

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  • Lj-
    October 23, 2007
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    The rhyme is forced.

    And also, the first "your" should be "you're"

    Thank you for entering,
    Best of luck.


  • sca
    October 11, 2007

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    I think the first "your" should be a "you're" as the phrase is "now that you are gone", not that "you" own the "gone".


  • BeautifulFlame
    October 10, 2007
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    Great one my dear!