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My Passion (Dasyure)

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Taste your sweet nectar
like plump ripe grapes on the vine
as a bee flies, pollen collector
simply amazed you are mine
softly kissing lips

Savoring passion
tracing with my fingertips
our newfound love I will not ration
partaking of it slowly
your body solely

I'm your protector
as one we will both combine
have no conscientious objector
this lucky love is divine
taking smaller sips

Love and compassion
the moon we will soon eclipse
in our own wild sensual fashion
praising all that is holy
you own me wholly







Author notes

Stanza 1: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme a,b,a,b,c

Stanza 2: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme d,c,d,e,e

Stanza 3: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme a,b,a,b,c

Stanza 4: 5 lines
Syllable count of 5,7,9,7,5
Rhyme scheme d,c,d,e,e

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 9, 2007
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    Great form penned.
    Just lovely.
    Thanks for sharing.

    Tory


  • Errant Panther gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    very well done, glad you tried it out and hope you enjoyed the challenge of it. Just one mis-count "I am your protector" has 6 syllables not 5, amend it to "I'm" and it works perfectly, again well done and thanks for trying it.


    • Griswold silver member
      October 9, 2007
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      Wonder how I missed that!!! Edited. Thanks for a fun new form