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Without You



Without you the sun wouldn't shine
my world would be empty and bleak

The fire that warms through darkest night
you are my light, you are my life

My world would be empty and bleak

if you were to leave me alone
No tender touch from your sweet lips
to fuel this passion that we share

The fire that warms through darkest night
you give me a reason to dream
My hopes for us you keep alive
with softly whispered words of love

You are my light, you are my life
my greatest fear is that you'll leave
So take me in your arms, my love

say they'll never take you away

 

 

 

 

 

 

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OPTION # 1 -

You are my light, you are my life
my greatest fear is that you'll leave
So take me in your arms, my love

say they'll never take you away


Retourne - Like so many other French forms, the Retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.

 

 

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  • Romily
    November 24, 2007
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    you deserve something from me. You make me feel! wait!
    though I love your entire poem..I specially love these lines very much, and can relate me.

    My world would be empty and bleak

    if you were to leave me alone
    No tender touch from your sweet lips
    to fuel this passion that we share


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    October 9, 2007

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    the photo for this poem gives it a real feel of what the woman's world would be like if her fears would come to pass. Thank you for your entry.


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    Love it ! !

    It doesn't seem to matter what form of poetry you put your hand to, you make a masterpiece out of it Well done, and good luck in this contest