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All I Say

and all i have to say is i love you longer than the sun will remember how to shine

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you can count off for punctuation and no caps, but i don't really give a rat's ass

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  • Lj-
    October 23, 2007

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    As your author's notes state, I must:

    "All I have to say is I love you longer than the sun will remember how to shine"

    "rememeber" should be "remember"


    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.


  • aeolia
    October 11, 2007

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    I like the idea of this, and it leaves me feeling... all light & stuff, if that explains anything. However, you might want to add quotation marks from the "i love you" to the end. It'd be for an easier read.

    Nice one-liner, though.
    -Cris


  • sca
    October 11, 2007

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    I'd remove the "and" from the start, capitalise the "I"s and maybe the start, because you mighn't give a rats arse but the words themselves read beautifully, but you've left them unpolished. And anyone bothering to read will care.

    => Jess


  • tjj
    October 10, 2007
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    oh pritty


    • Izu
      October 10, 2007
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      .

    • Izu
      October 10, 2007
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      pretty....learn to spell, its horible how your on a computer which is faster than writing and yet you spellit pritty.....no


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    Wow. That was is absolutely beautiful. I loved it. You completely captured the point of one liners in creating a world of poetry in one.single.line.
    Good luck in the contest.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

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