The heart is broken, time no more stood still, you became a past.
A contest entry
- One Liners by Lj-.
300 points, ended October 23, 2007, 24 entries
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that's excellent !
especially how you say 'time no more stood still' in past tense when you said 'the heart is broken' in present tense and the way you left out the connection of the heart and the person... THE heart is broken.. not MY heart or HER heart.. THE heart
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This is a very good one liner you have here.
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Time no more stood still It denotes very intense feelings of love and then the strength of will demanding closure You became a past Excelent
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I liked "you became a past."
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Good luck.
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AWE! this pulls the tears!...So simple and so few words yet it grips the heart! You became a past!...Winner for sure!
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