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Yet...


I’m sickened sweetly by regretting
yet…
see your face and fear forgetting.

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  • Lj-
    October 11, 2007
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    I liked this. Good use of rhyme.

    Thank you for entering,
    Best of luck.


  • WisdomWarrior
    October 9, 2007
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    Wow. This is profound! I love the pages of wisdom you squeezed into these three lines. I see the struggle between wisdom and desire. This is the wrestling match we go struggle with everyday, the best decision and the one we want to make.

    Well writ.

    One Love,

    John

  • almostgone
    October 9, 2007

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    Great job! Loved the rhyme as well. It may be a little long for the contest but hopefully she overlooks it. Best of luck!


  • chugglepuff
    October 9, 2007

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    Superb, the rhyme works perfectly and feels so natural. I love how much you've said with so little, describing a complex, confusing feeling so simply. Really good job. Best of luck with the contest!


  • TwilightDazzles
    October 9, 2007

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    Nice take on the prompt. "Sickened sweetly" Such a creative phrase. And I enjoyed your subtle alliteration! Best wishes!

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