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Two Tongues

We have two tongues: one in the mouth; one in the shoe; one yaps&flaps, one walks&talks

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  • Lj-
    October 23, 2007

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    I don't like the symbols between 'yaps' and 'flaps' or 'walks' and 'talks.'

    Cool ideas here.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.


  • sca
    October 11, 2007

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    I don't like all the extra symbols. It's too close to dirty pretty - something I've never really got into.

    There's a space missing "tongues;one" and "flaps,one"... and on either side of the &s, although I'm guessing that's intentional. I'd like it better if they were words.

    But I am prejudiced against the style, and the words themselves are quite profound,

    => Jess