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Her Heart~

I opened her journal
carved it
like a diamond
rough & precious.

Nestled
in her security
her own uniqueness
fluttered

Painful pleasures

reverberating
in coaled feathers

I knew her life
read it
inbetween
 the lines

in
& out of
wavering thoughts

I would rid
the chamber of
secrets pain

Like a knife
under fingernails

with letter opener ripped her wing

Lifeless
she landed upon soiled moss
Bound on parchment
by a mark in leather

she would again wake
completely perfect,
no painful memories 
....and I closed this
bible of biography

her thank you 
wasn't necessary...

Author notes

Picture prompt

 

Dedicated to a friend~

Even though it's not necessary- " Thank you"

No name needed ~you know who you are ;)

 

Thanks for reading ~

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  • sweet arrival gold member
    August 27

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    beautiful... what a wonderful dedication. glad to see the bronze, too


  • individuality gold member
    July 29

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    a good poem, ah to search the words of another soul, i suppose a journal is just like poetry really, thoughts and emotions thrown down on the page, though a journal is more personal, a poem can be just made up to suit an idea.


  • Always Deena
    March 2, 2008

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    So many secrets, as women, we hold intrust. This tells the story of all. It is beautiful, breathtaking and the soundtrack to friendships worldwide.
    Love you~
    As Always,
    Deena


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 15, 2007

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    Wow,

    A very potent piece of poetry that leaves many to ponder upon your whispering words that grace the reader's eyes, and seeps into there soul. Love what you did with this. Great use of metaphors, and lots of tender imagery! Thanks for sharing you! And congrates on the Bronze! Much love sweet soul! Peace, Timothy


  • Floorboards
    October 14, 2007

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    Excellent

    I absolutely love this, the imagery is sublime. "reverberating in coaled feathers", is a great line, I can't fully explain, this poem just has a certain something I can't put my finger on,
    Brilliant work indeed my friend,
    Alex.


  • Mad Moon silver member
    October 13, 2007

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    Girl...This is simply AMAZING! Your metaphors are wondrous as is your abundant imagery. The verbiage is marvelous. One of your best works yet!!! That first stanza is KILLER,

    "...I opened her journal
    carved it
    like a diamond
    rough & precious....."

    and the perfect draw into the beautiful body of this well penned poem. I love the reference to a diamond. It depicts more that just the "hardness," but also the transition from ordinary to beauty. Outstanding! ....and that last line....perfection! Extremely well done, my friend! KUDOS!!


  • Tender Expressions
    October 12, 2007

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    The image is gorgeous! Your words have spilled from your pen so gently upon this page. The thanks you give to your friend is one that is felt and expressed straight from the heart. I see you have been awarded a bronze trophy for this piece. Most surely deserved I would say!


  • aliceramone
    October 11, 2007

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    a great take on the prompt...great metaphors used here and I really dig the lines
    "nestled
    in her security
    her own uniqueness
    fluttered"
    ...words float gracefully throughout-congrats on the shiny...thanks


  • poetryality silver member
    October 10, 2007

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    Congratulations on winning the bronze trophy dear lady. This poem could be addressed to me. I relate to this in so many ways.

    "Lifeless
    she landed upon soiled moss
    Bound on parchment
    by a mark in leather"

    I love the ending. Sometimes we just know. Lovely! You have penned a piercing work here dear sister. You keep this up now!


    Always ♥

    Renee


  • tomisb
    October 10, 2007

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    This one dances along the edge of belief, crys in my heart to all the friends and lovers left behind but never forgotten. This has and deep ache in it that I think any caring person has felt. We try so hard to never do harm and are so aware of the ones we have hurt that sometimes we forget the pain that is necessary and the gift that it can be.
    Love, Tom B.


  • Bedroom Eyes
    October 10, 2007

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    It's apt that the contest is named "what do you see?", because I see more than meets the eye myself

    Parallels in heart and soul bring to light much understanding and vision. Reading between the lines is something that is learned through trials and strife...

    ...that being said, I understand where this came from...

    I knew her life
    read it
    in between
    the lines

    in
    & out of
    wavering thoughts

    I would rid
    the chamber of
    secrets pain

    To the healing of wounds both old and new...thanks may not be necessary...but are always heartfelt

    Nicely done here Joy!

    Congrats on your trophy win!


  • Grimoire
    October 10, 2007

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    If I understand this correctly, and I hope I do...........
    did you find someones diary? The description, and the journey, from discovery until the end is awesome. I didn't catch it, (if I am interpreting correctly) at first couple of reads. But then it hit me like a ton of bricks. It made the next couple of reads spring to life for me. I really like it. Nicely done poet. Good luck in the contest.


    • HeavenonEarth
      October 10, 2007
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      Thank you for the bronze and such a wonderful comment
      Your picture prompt inspired this the words just flew and I didn't think of "what to write" it just "penned itself"

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