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My Heart Swells

Dancing enticement concerning you
intoxicating intense interplay
your dreamy eyes, gaze of intent
stealing my heart by degrees

Hearing your voice, my utmost choice
your touch escalates my desire
my jumbled emotions beckon you
to take your game a notch higher

Enraptured bliss performs ecstasy
sustaining regal swells of joy
you're all I'll ever need or want
so don't stop now, please don't

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  • BeautifulFlame
    October 12, 2007

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    This was fantastic!
    Beautfully written i hear ya too
    Great job
    ~Lisa~


    • 2lullabyhaven
      October 12, 2007
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      Wow this is what I would like to call-a top shelf review, I love those so thanks very muchlol


  • aliceramone
    October 9, 2007
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    very good passionate imagery here with good alliteration and "jumbled emotions"-well done Patricia


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    give me a phone call pat .hear my voice. and you won't stop hun. lol .love it/you..best of luck again xxxpp

    • 2lullabyhaven
      October 9, 2007
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      Thanks Peter

      Give me your number Peter, we'll see what we can do...hahahaha


  • midnight eyes
    October 9, 2007
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    What a great poem, keep up the work.


    Amber


  • Expression
    October 9, 2007

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    beautiful...i can sense passion here. i like the 2nd best..good luck..i can tell this is gonna be a hard contest to judge

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