I look for comfort
in the most insane wishes
impossible to obtain.
You seek your comfort
in a mostly inane way
still, our passions beat as one.
A contest entry
- Delightful Shortforms by delightfulmess.
1200 points, ended October 21, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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oh i fall under this category.
indeed i do. sometimes hard to deal with but he accepts me the way i am insanity and all
Best wishes
Tory -
Oh I like this piece.
Very classic imagery. Well done.
Thank you for entering the contest
delila
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Powerful short write
Seekers and we all are seekers are driven by some force you know. It could be passion fired with lust it could be urge powered by greed, in this case its passion for comfort. All roads lead to one destination early or late is relative oneness is founded though the ways are different and this is strange or to me profound. This duality that we live in for a time is full of this kind of seeking. It can be good or not good but as long as we have life we will seek comfort either in a wfe or husband or drugs tv and escape. These short poems cause my mind to wonder and wander. I enjoyed reading it and the mind trip it took me on because I have seen multitudes of seekers in my short life. I can relate. Improvement on this poem could be to lengthen it and elaborate on the seeker and the sought after but that would take the trip I had a way because then there would be no trip. I think I would leave it just as it IS.
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Thank You!
I'm sorry it took so long to get back to you. My "muse" has been keeping me frantic. However, that's no reason to be rude. I really appreciate your insights and advice. Thanks so much!
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