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Sneezing Again.







sneezing again
the smell of tissue
on the open fire









Andrew Hide

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  • Emerald13
    October 10, 2007

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    this is so cleverly done ... i have been back a few times trying to gather my thoughts ... 'again' tells me its a cold or hayfever which would give me the season ! being an open fire its a cold and winter ...

    the second line is great ... it gives us the whole story that is within the moment (close up and observed using your senses)

    lovely sound and scent haiku .. >>> Gina

  • OldePoet
    October 10, 2007

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    Thats one way to get rid of your cold; burn the virus!

    I wonder, is that supposed to be Haiku? I wouldve thought it was 5 7 5. Ah well, still a creative poem.

    • AndrewHide silver member
      October 10, 2007
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      Thankyou Oldepoet, yes it is a haiku, haiku never have been written in syllables of 5-7-5 except resently due to the miss-understanding of translaters trying to fit Eastern poetry styles into Western poetic styles.


      Andrew