Rescue Me...
Buried deep inside
crippling darkness.
Suffocated by this
blanket of regret.
I hunger for
a tiny taste
of freedom.
Liberation from
these biting teeth
of guilt.
Hands withered
By lack of light,
reach out
in blind desperation.
Frantically seeking
a small piece of
pink glowing,
sunset painted clouds.
My soul craves
Autumn’s beauty.
The crisp scent of
dancing corn stalks
swayed by cooling breezes.
The soft yellow flicker
reflecting in hallowed,
hand carved pumpkins.
My eyes search
For leaves marbled
in bright shades of
yellow, orange and red.
My thirsting tongue
longs for the sweet
taste of sunshine.
But alas,
My view is distorted
by muddy puddles
of remorse dripping
from my eyes,
and my mouth is filled
with dry, bitter ashes
of bridges burnt.
Rescue Me...
A contest entry
- Inspire me xXx show me your FEELINGS xXx TOUCH ME! by xblakxrosexremainsx.
420 points, ended October 24, 2007, 46 entries
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Amazing!!!
This poem made me think alot of what it was meant to show. But i finally understood it and its WONDERFUL. I loved how u described the situation, like how u showed all the feelings indeed.
This is my favorite part:
"Hands withered
By lack of light,
reach out
in blind desperation.
Frantically seeking
a small piece of
pink glowing,
sunset painted clouds."
I belive you could improve it by using shorter stanzas. Maybe. Buts amazing.
I loved the language too.
Thanks for this fantastic entry. Good Luck!!!
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