Thinking of you now
your touch, kisses, caresses
the way you move does thrill me.
Sensual movement
hips swaying seductively
bringing thoughts of evening fun.
Author notes
Sedoka
The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following
syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem, may address the
same subject from differing perspectives.
Katauta is an unrhymed three-line poem the following syllable counts: 5/7/7.
Love you baby.
In a list
A contest entry
- Delightful Shortforms by delightfulmess.
1200 points, ended October 21, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh what a beautiful sedoka.
I love how you have guided the reader
yet let a lot to the imagination... Of course
that is the power of the short forms Thank you for entering
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A good piece in the sedoka form, this leaves the reader with a lot implied, which is a good thing to add strength in a poem.
I did find L3 reads a little awkwardly.
Good luck in the contest.
Andrew -
awww this was a beautiful write and so wonderfully written with affection
well done dad and best of luck
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i like this
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Well done on the form.
The passion felt in this piece makes it better.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Tory
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