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Red

Red are the flowers, where my garden grows
Red glossy lips for tasting sweet red wine
Red painted nails and pretty matching toes
Red is the color, making life divine

Red glossy lips for tasting sweet red wine
Red is my heart for giving you my love
Red is the color, making life divine
Red is the sunset, in the sky above

Red is my heart for giving you my love
Red is the rose, such a pretty flower
Red is the sunset, in the sky above
Red is the color with the strongest pow’r

Red is the rose, such a pretty flower
Red painted nails and pretty matching toes
Red is the color with the strongest pow’r
Red are the flowers, where my garden grows

 

 

 

 

Author notes

This Pantoum is composed in decasyllable with each line beginning with the identical word.  

Pantoum Poetry
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza

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  • ashjoe76
    October 28, 2007
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    very good

    A remarkable entry. Lovely!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    October 24, 2007

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    These thoughts brighten a page and shout with positivity. The repetition of this form lends itself well to creating a feeling of pleasure in the simple things. Blue


  • PoetsAngel
    October 12, 2007
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    Forgot these


  • PoetsAngel
    October 12, 2007

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    Beautiful Sis, I can see I have a lot of catching up to do...am so sorry I haven't been around


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 9, 2007
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    Beautiful mix of imagery

    natural and human. Lovely poem.


  • HaleyMary
    October 9, 2007

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    Beautiful write. Makes me think of how the color red can be like a symbol of both love and life, red like a heart and red like the blood in our bodies that gives us life.
    Wonderful form as always. You have such great talent when it comes to these form poems. Keep writing.


  • Desire gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    Holy Moly Guacamole!!

    Is there any form You have not tried yet
    Love this Pantoum and the message You have brought
    forth
    Beautiful words-meaning

    Made me love red all over again

    Thank You form Queen
    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    October 9, 2007

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    Roses are red
    Red lips want to play
    This is the best
    Poem I've red all day.

    So playful with the structure. Fun fun fun.


  • Laura
    October 9, 2007
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    ohhh wow you just keep on getting better xxxx


  • Nevel
    October 9, 2007

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    Thank you for your beautiful poem.Very learning your explaination how to built your poem!I can't give you applauses,I'm only free member,otherwise you get three,I'm sorry for this.


  • passim silver member
    October 9, 2007
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    I forgot the applause


  • passim silver member
    October 9, 2007

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    This is a lovely poem. It is certainly full of imagery and glows with colour. I like it. Well done


    • Amera gold member
      October 9, 2007
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      thanks, I was editing, that's why no one else noticed it. I love all the help I can get.


  • capricornpoet
    October 9, 2007

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    lovely pantoum

    Here the flow of the pantoum resembles a dance, of love, of youth's sensualities, of freshness and
    lightness of being...tickles my pink ..loved this..
    inpires and lifts ones spirit to love.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 9, 2007
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    Ah..
    This was awesome. I love the extra repetition.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 9, 2007

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    Red is the color with the strongest pow’r
    Red is the color, making life divine

    Indeed you are right..this is amazing description of the color in so much poetic verse..a great write is here..well done..

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