You take ur hands and pull of my bra
u stand back and stare in awe
marveling at the sight of my breasts so perfectly erect
i bite my lip when suddenly they and ur lips connect
as u kiss my body goin in downward direction
you part my legs for a better inspection
u tease me with ur tongue until i insist
u give me a look and i get the gist
i throw back my arms and in handcuffs they go
and u fuck me long and hard, not gentle, short and slow
i have u uncuff me and i take u in my mouth
and at the same time u go down south
a sexy 69,so equally pleasured
as u taste the gold that's so wonderfully treasured
on to the floor, u hit it from the back
i back it up fast , my ass u smack
u pick me and put me on the wall
as u beat it up u start to trigger my waterfall
you lay me down and get back on top
in and out u go baby don't stop
as we switch positions i begin to ride and rock
up and down i bounce then my body shakes like its goin into shock
as we lay there intertwined we both cum as one
sprawled out on the floor we reminisce on the fun
soon as i relax something stops the scene
i wake up and realize that it was just a dream
it felt so real though it wasn't in all actuality
but..why don't we make this dream into a reality
A contest entry
- EROTICA CONTEST - UNDER 18 ONLY by risewiththesmoke.
669 points, ended November 1, 2007, 11 entries
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355 points, ended October 18, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
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450 points, ended December 21, 2007, 17 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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don't see a silver, sorry
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thank you for entering my contest, and making me smile...good job
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I admit, on the first I found the txt style a little off putting, but after reading for a second time I find it adds to the overall fast paced, rough effect. I love the twist at the end too, it makes the whole thing that bit more real (we've all been there, after all). Good luck in the contest!
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This is sexxy and hot.. ive had many dreams and fantasies like this but i cant sadly act them out the only thing.. is that you should spell out "you" instead of puttin "u" also with your.. it makes it look alil choppy
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This is great! I had one of those dreams the other night!! Very much like this poem you have written!! I loved every piece of it
Great!!! Thank you so much for entering and best of luck in the contest!!!
Leslie
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Very good write. Good luck in the contest!
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Wow, this is great! Dreams like this should never end! I love the imagery and passion that you wrote this with. Well done, good luck to you with it, and keep up the wonderful work here!
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Wow, what a blissful dream indeed. lol. I love the mood and wording of this write. Kudos to you.
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Nice ending. I think this was pretty smooth. Much luck to you.
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lol i like the ending... and great rhyme pattern. thanks for entering!
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Maybe we could make this dream in to reality... lol lol
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Gurrl that was hott. Though I think this line here "i bite my lip when suddenly they and ur lips connect" I think you should say, "I bite my bottom lip when suddenly my breast and your lips connect" I like it though. I have no other suggestions, that's what's up.
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thanx..and yea i see that would work better. but yea thanx again
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i love this its so desciptive!! and very playful
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thank u so very much..
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This seems like it could have been a blow by blow account hahahlol
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dam...lil shawty freaky
i see u there w/ yo freaky dreams lol. keep at it i liked it.
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lol u seem drawn to the freaky stuff huh...why dnt u comment on one thats not lol but yea thank u for the comment
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hahahahah omg this was so fucking hot damn I love this it was full of imagery I cant write erotica like that talent I tell you you've got talent you should start writting short stories of erotica
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THANK U SO MUCH FOR THE COMMENT! I DNT KNO ABOUT THE SHORT STORIES, BUT I WILL DEFINATELY THINK ON IT..THANX AGAIN
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hahahahahahaha, yes Kaila, most definetly a freak >.<
I liked the ending!
Good luck in the contest!
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lol thank u
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