Verse 1
Surrounded by the night
shadows form around me
I become transfixed by
the visions that I see.
Verse 2
I bleed here in the darkness
mem'ries interlude the pain
I try and free myself from
this life that I disdain.
Chorus
Am I transparant
what can you see?
Staring into demons eyes
Loosing my morality.
My truth is vanished
My light is gone.
I am nothing but
a devil's pawn.
Verse 3
Haunting me until I'm numb
Eerie reflections now appear
they rape me of my sanity
and strangle me with fear.
Verse 4
My viens are filled with poisen
a price I have to pay.
This revelation passes by.
I exhale and slip away.
Repeat chorus
whispers (guy)
I see your body stained with blood.
Your face still wet with tears.
My heart is crushed,
My soul is burned
my love has disappeared.
whipers (girl)
Angels I will never see
Heaven I will never taste.
bridge
Is it too late for me to return?
Is it too late for me to learn?
Repeat chorus 2x
Author notes
I wrote this about 4 years ago when I was obsessed with Evanescence, so I suppose if I could picture any band performing it, it would be them.
A contest entry
- To Dream A Dark Smile by Redrusty66.
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What did you think
Comments
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Nice work, great flow and scheme, you made excellent use of vocabulary mechanics and left ample room for personal perspective to the reader. Thanks for the great read.
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Very good, We are all the devils pawns...
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I normally don't read lyrics, but I got sucked in by it being listed as angst...heh
) I'm glad I did. What a surprise it was to read a song that I actual found myself singing in my head while reading it. Although after the third time I just felt more like a groupie... None the less this song was well written and nicely done. *holds up lighter*
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very deap. it gets under my skin. good write.
vm
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fabulous
This song is great I like it very much you explained how everything felt with great detail keep up the great writing I like to read your poetry... well hope to read more soon... it's been awhile since I have read your stuff but keep it up you are a great writer.... dont let it go to waste.
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WOW!! this is an AWESOME song!! i like this part of the chorus especially:
My truth is vanished
My light is gone.
I am nothing but
a devil's pawn.
not only are the words PoWeRfUl, but the flow is excellent! this is an awesome song and i wish i could hear it be performed,f i you know what i mean...
clever topic, great write!
keep it up
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wow this is good...i'm amazed! very well-written
, i've been trying to write lyrics(i only have one so far) and this inspires me even more... i like the story told through this, very dark and emotional, and thats what i like about this poem, great flow of words and imagery shown! love it!!
i need to check out some more of your work..
thanks for commentin!
alwayz,
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sad..scary and wel written..ill have to read more of your stuff to see if its the best though..you see talented..thanks
for the comments on my work...lisa~~~
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