I'm holding on
But by a thread
With means I can稚 explain
I知 letting go
Of what I know
Of that I can稚 retain
I知 holding on, not letting go
Of what you meant to me
I知 letting go, not hanging on
Of what was done to me
By holding on
I知 letting go
How値l I deal with losing you?
Cause by holding on to what is good
Will soothe away my pain
By letting go of you, my love
Make my eyes forever rain
Author notes
In loving memory of my husband
05/12/1970 ~ 26/10/2004
Anton,
Together Forever
"Poplap"
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest for Widows & Widowers, and Beyond by MassMan.
950 points, ended November 12, 2007, 6 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CONTEST : "WINGS OF COMPASSION IN TIMES OF GRIEF" by maa by maa.
2221 points, ended August 26, 43 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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holding on and letting go, just an amazing poem!!!
This is inspiring, how to hold on to those golden memories by letting all the others go.... I have never thought about it like this....
And when there's days the rain from your eyes obscure everything around you, remember all those rainbow times!
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I love the way you unite the seeming duality between "holding on" and "letting go" through your loving verse ... I cannot even imagine how you have managed and are still managing to face and go through such a challenge of losing the mate of your young marriage in such a tragic manner ...
but I feel that anton is with you on a suble plane, showing you that you are so much stronger than you believe, and guiding you towards your indwelling ressources, gifts and talents, yet to be discovered ... there are a lot of blessings still to be revealed to you ... please say "YES !" and let life embrace you with its loving arms ...
much love,
marion
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Healed ...
but in another Realm ... Whole. Together forever.
The happiness shared cannot ever be taken: not by death's silly games ... Our souls are whole, do you know? Take flight, beloved One ... Enjoy the sun with your little one, for the sharedness is still whole and yours ... FOREVER.
Love
Myra
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very sad poem, it must have been extremely hard to write... but you did such a good job of penning your inner most emotions. I am sad for your loss! I don't know what I would do if I lost my husband. keep writing it's good theropy!
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A said poem for any person to have to write. There does come a time after we loose someone that we have to let go for we are still living and have to move on but the memories with always be in your heart and never forgotten that is special. Big hugs from across the Water Brian.
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My heart truly goes out to you my dear may you find peace in your sorrow and comfort to your soul. Our legacy is in how we love. Peace in light and love. Best wishes to you and your family.
Noah
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Its so sad!!!! But I love it. Its very well written. I like how I can almost hear music playing in the background. It'd make a great song.
Excellent job!
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bravo
Oh, exceptionally sad and so poignant, but with a note of hope in it as well. Very well and potently done poem... bravo... bravo ... bravo...
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How dreadful and harsh,
The road we sometimes pick to march;
More painful than a knife,
Penetrating sometimes a dream to dive;
I know that it's hard for a dream to toss,
But am really sorry for your loss...
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Truly painful. I will pray that your heart will heal and your mind will remember, forever.
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This is a truly beautiful and pained peace. Losing loved ones is never easy, but holding on to the good memories and learning to heal from the pain makes life livable and richer for the experience. He was lucky to have you; this dedication does wonder for his memory.
RIP,
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WOW, this was such a heartfelt piece, I can feel your pain when it comes to losing loved ones, but a husband is an entire differnt loss, This was so emotional and sad, I felt your pain through your beautiful words, best of luck to you!
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Your wonderful tribute to your husband touched my heart and soul. I can't even imagine how you must feel. I'm so sorry for your pain. May God bless you sweetie and always hold you close. Love, Cathy
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Dear lady, your heart to feel the loss, yet ever to hold the love.Do not be afraid to let go! For never will your love for him die.
And how are you to live if you do not?
Let go the man to feel his warmth.
But fill your heart with light, not dark, that you are loved by him forever too.
For he lives on, in the child you bore through your love for him.
And though their seems no reason to it all.
Your belief in this must conquer all your doubt.
For in his world now, he pains you cannot live in yours without him.
So live with love in your heart and smile,although it filled with tears now,let the pain of loss be replaced by simply love.
And never question why?
Or always you will pain.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2899408
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dear God, sweet girl. I am so sorry for your loss of your husband. I cannot even imagine! This is so heart felt and sad
My heart goes out to you always and to your precious Aneka
All my love and blessings!
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I'm sorry for the pain you feel
Don't fear losing his memories it just won't happen, they are just burrowing deeper to live protected and pure inside your heart forever and to be found by you in your dreams.
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Good luck in the competition. You are so young and to be widowed at this age must be real hard?
I see you do not want to let go of him. Seems like you are scared of forgetting him.
Sorry for your loss!
Inki
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Absolutly beautiful,
no more words to write, just tears.
Dolores xxxx
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This is such a beautiful piece, I so totally understand how you feel, and how you can hold on and let go at the same time. Plus the fear and quilt, along with the peace and relief to. It can rip your heart apart. Good write, good luck in the contest.... Hugs
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Brilliant use of Irony
I know how it feels to lose a loved one.
It surely takes time to let go.
Very nicely written:-)
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You bring forth such a state of irony which is so much a part of the widowed state. I know what you are talking about. It is also a struggle when one is married again, --how much should one let go, and how much should one hold on-and keep in memory, to the honor of the previous, without hindering the present.
Thanks for this entry.
Davi -
A very honest poem
You have put into a nutshell what we have to face when we lose a loved one. I think you have found your way through the bewildering emotions that are so painful and seem so unanswerable.
You have the gift of clarifying complicated feelings.
I love your writing, it's so honest and open. Thank you for the priviledge of reading it.
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This is heartfelt and shows the reader how much confusion there is surrounding death, holding on or letting go...and what is healthy for us....how much of each..this makes me think of, very emotional content, and the poem has wonderful flow, the form is interesting...
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Fantastic, so sorry about your husband. I am a South African currently living in China, I think this poem touched me even more because of that. Good luck and have faith. Please keep writing.
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Thanks for the lovely comment!! So glad to meet a fellow SA'can
Check out Cuffed by guilt... Think you will feel homesick 
Thanks again for stopping by...
Becks
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some comfort
death is a thief . . so hard to deal with . . nice expression here and grief shows through . . like " Of that I can't retain" and "I'm holding on,not letting go" . . time will help so much . . nice write !!
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you show courage in adversity and sorrow straight from the heart. May your pain eventually lessen somewhat, and as this poem says ....by holding on you are also letting go. You are holding on to the good , to the love that you will always remember and I believe that is what eventually will enable you to let go so you can live again fully [and in that fullness your husband will always fill a big place in your heart and in yours and your daughter's memories] Unfortunately I have no words to ease your pain , therefore I can only tell you that I know there is a much bigger force than myself that will cradle you in comfort and love,
z
reenie
PS. I am honoured to have been added to your favs
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A beautiful piece ...
you are clearly a very gifted Writer who pens from the heart. I'm so glad I checked in, today. x
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Not sure
really not sure how to take this being that he is a polceman.. But it is sadly beautiful
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Very Nice
Hi - Rebekah - This Dobar Dan - came here to return the favor - you commented on my poem "Mandela" - So sorry for your loss - The pain that goes with loosing a loved one - I think you poetry is beautiful the rhyme and flow are great - the way you make the words dance is great too - but of course the content is what this poem is all about - letting go - ouch - but life goes on - I wrote a poem for a grieving mother on here - its called "Safe In The Arms Of Jesus" keep on writing - you are good at it - Bless God - Joe
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very aigre-doux...i like your style
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oh my...this is such a very beautiful poem...you were so true to your feelings...and each word was full of longingness...I know I can't do anything about what happened in the past...but I hope that the present and the future are bright for you...you have a lovely heart and I'm glad that I've read your poem...
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Thank you so very much for your inputs!!!
I did make some changes and hope that it sounds alright now!
This is my favorite of all my poems and still cry when I read it.
THANKS AGAIN!!!
More comments welcome anytime!
Love,
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This is another beautiful poem with so much feelings in the words. I loved what you have done here, and the authors notes is great. I love that saying, it can mean so much, so sorry for your loss.
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Rebekah,
Thanks for pointing me this way. What a sad, yet beautiful poem here. Sometimes holding on is all there is left to do and your pain speaks clearly in this piece. I think Black Widow made some very good suggestions in her indepth critique she left. I too found the line:
How I deal with losing you?
a bit awkward. Perhaps you could try:
To deal with losing you.
just a suggestion
Ruth
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Beautiful. This is a very good write. Good luck in the contest.
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this poem is overflowing with emotion. I am so sorry for your loss. I shall pray for you. Thank you for your entry.
God Bless,
A. MacEwan
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I really enjoyed this piece. The way it is torn in between letting go and holding on. Perhaps wanting to let go, and at the same time being unable to... because letting go would mean to give up, and giving up isn't always easy... because it somehow makes it seem like all the time spent holding on was empty and valueless, when in reality it isn't... it was a learning experience.
then reading your quote I see that this is about death... so I would guess that the piece is about letting go of the pain and finally moving on? but feeling like you moved on that person will be forgotten... and maybe you feel guilty because you (by you i mean the speaker, i'm not sure if this is personal or contest prompted) are still here and they are not, so you feel that because they died, it's not fair that you continue living as if they never existed... but that is not the case.
on format, I liked it. There were a few pieces that sounded a littly iffy to me. For example:
-I’m letting go not hanging on
Of what this done to me-
the second line in this couplet kinda sounded like it was missing "has" between this and done... I don't know... i just thin it might sound a little more gramatically correct... but then i'm not sure if you were working with syllable counts and then this adding has would throw it off.
the second part i was a little eeky about was:
-By holding on
I’m letting go
How I deal with losing you?-
the last line... it sounds like it would sound better "how do i deal with losing you" *adding "do"
but again... i don't know if it throws off something with syllables or anything. i didn't count the syllables cuz i'm pressed for time right now so i couldn't tell if that's what you were doing.
the last stanza.... if i'm not mistaken it's spelled "soothe"
also... the tense of the last stanza is a little off...
-Cause by holding on to what is good
Will sooth away my pain
By letting go of you, my love
Makes my eyes forever ra-
the first couplet you are speaking of the future "will soothe away..."
but then the last line speaks in present tense "makes my eyes...." if you wanted to keep it in the same tense then it should be "will make my eyes forever rain" unless you put it in present tense to indicate that you are starting to let go...
anyway, this was beautiful.
thanks for inviting me to read and comment.
have a good day!
ps: haha my name is Rebecca also... (just spelled different than yours i guess lol)
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awww
How sweet and touching. I feel so much emotion in this piece and it is well written. Thanks for asking me to read this and God bless you my friend, Mark
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This is such a sad write.To lose someone that you love is the hardest thing. Wishing you much peace and love
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A very sad piece
I like this a lot and I like the flow of the piece too. such a very very sad and deeply-emotional piece this is. The ending is particualarly sad when you realize that you have to, at last, let that person go if you truly love them. Keep writing, you got talent.
All the best
Wayne
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This is wonderful with smooth flow ant thought progression. You have painted emotional image very well and the center alignment seems to work well with this poem. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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Wow, it's great. I can empathise deeply with you, I love the structure in this, Keep being strong
CR
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You continue holding on strong... you are so very brave. I know I would never be able to keep myself together if I lost my husband... I am not that strong... and it truly moves me to see women like you... well done. Good luck in the contest.
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