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I love the pain you cause me
as day after day
 I turn in the hopes
that maybe today
you will love me
like yesterday.

In my schoolgirl fantasy
you write me long letters
and drop me with a kiss
 we fall
into that perfect Hallmark moment.

It never happens.


Which is worse?
The fact that I still
dream
or that you walk past me
a whisper
of who you used to be?

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  • tara wilson gold member
    October 25, 2007

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    This is another excellent poem - a strong voice in this despite the situation...
    "I love the pain you cause me
    as day after day
    I turn in the hopes
    that maybe today
    you will love me
    like yesterday."

    I do know this feeling


  • Annalise
    October 13, 2007

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    Hallmark is as bad as Disney, ya know? They fairydust everything... life is so different, though. People don't have romantic thoughts, they leave those up to the card maker. And don't even get me started on Disney with it's happily-ever-afters and princess-dreams-come-true. Ugh! "It's not fair"

    "a whisper//of who you used to be" man, do I know that.

    Great poem.


  • Twist of Faith
    October 9, 2007

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    This piece is amazing. Time certainly does change things, not always for the better. But we continue to hope, and endure...I truly understand this.


  • cherche -d -ame
    October 9, 2007
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    my sweet Freckles...as usual you know how to pull on the heartstrings of your readers with every word you write. May those Hallmark moments only have faded for a little bit...and may they return when you least expect them [many times they do]. Much love to you and yours,
    xoxoxoxoxo
    reenie


  • sara20
    October 9, 2007
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    this is beautiful! well written! It draws your atention of ho w sad and true it is!


  • arafura gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    hallmark moment...

    Great stuff poet! I love the questioning, hauntingly sad tone of this. You draw your picture with vivid starkness...


  • HeavenScent4U
    October 9, 2007

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    oh wow, this is so sadly beautiful i don't know what else to say except for that it has tugged at my heart of remembrance of someone from my past. best of luck in the contest dear. be well and be blessed

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