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Death the Maiden

Watching the drivel of darkness
pour
out of the mouths of babes
silent and alone on the sidelines;
I feel mockery
slither in my veins.
You call out to it like a beacon in the night
yet trust
when death
that unfair maiden calls out to you
you are never ready.
She takes on her terms.

A vicious bitch smack
across the heart,
she claws
her way through
your nightmares
leaving you
 the pieces of what
used to be
your life.
And you never saw
her coming.

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  • arafura gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    alone on the sidelines...

    Wow... this is great my talented friend! I love the structure of this. Your word choices are perfect and the imagery so very effective! Fine work!