Tiny shards surround me
I glance but do not care
My heart now shattered
Because my love, I shared
Betrayal at its finest
Pain beyond repair
I some how always new
My life would never play fair
Trust will never be possible
Love is nothing but a game
Im such a good person
My emotions dying is a shame.
I finally admit defeat
Numb is what I become
Im here to personally tell you
That the Demons finally won
In a list
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Comments
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well this is a little sad but it is good that you voiced your feelings. I understand what you feel. Good job M,
thanks for sharing. You are a great poet.
-AtiVan
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forgot this
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Wow
Oh wow Emily this is such a deep and very passionately painful piece. Your word choice is perfect and you have such a wonderful flow. You know that I wish I could take all this pain from you but I can't, all I can do is be there for you and help you get through it any way I can. We both know that I have been here too but because of you and a few others I have seen the truth and know there is hope. I hope I can do the same for you. Great write. It seems I have missed a lot of gret poetry while I was gone. Won't be doin that again. Now you know me I am mr. critical so I do have to point one thing out. I think lines 3 and 4 could be a little smoother. This is my suggestion--
My heart now has shattered
Because my love I shared(no comma)
Anyway, just athought. Great job as always.
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