Hands clasped tightly,
your next to me
as we watch a sunset,
pink turning to red,
red turning to purple.
Author notes
prompt: purple
exactly 20 words
A contest entry
- Create magic in 20 words by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended October 8, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice
This is a nice- quiet poem. Peaceful and serene.
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oh that makes me yawn!! it's sooooo peaceful! Very nice write! I'm falling to sleep! lol
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reminds me of the end of a perfectly beautiful summer day
very nice but i too think the word limit kind of killed what could have been greatness. maybe you might want to think about taking this and expanding on it 
be well and be blessed
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hum... purple? nice.. i must fall asleep before that.... OR! i just never watch that... especailly holding hands.. BUT! i like how you summed it up really welll in twenty lines.. which.. the sky down there dont realize that you did that... lol
good write!
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this was awesome.. i think, it is one of my favorites of yours... but!.. i think you need to go a little further with it as well.. then it would complete its awesomeness.... just one more great line... its like carries you straight up.. and then.. bam.. done.. but.. i really like it.
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i think it has potential, but the whole 20 words thing kinda killed it. to me, it needed a little more umph to truly make it magical, but it definitly has the ability to be truly splendiforous. honestly, i'd kinda like to see what would happen if you did expand it.
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How sincerely divine... x
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well.... you probably already know that i will like this.... sunsets, moon, stars, clouds... all favorites of mine... but being able to share them with someone holding hands... well... incredible...
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