The little girl
The little boy
Holding hands
Which they really enjoy
But then again
When we find happy
There's always someone
who finds it sappy
No, he's just jealous
Because that little girl
Is holding hands
In a different world
For the boy and the girl
The other, all they can see
Is it really love
At the mere age of three?
The other boy
sits on the slide
with anger
building up inside
He wants that girl
He wants to hold hands
he wants to enter
That fantasy land
He stands up
And decides right then
That it's the end
for the two of them
He takes a rock
and a clump of sand
and then approaches them
but until then he didn't understand
As he stared in the eyes
of the boy and the girl
and saw them within
their fantasy world
They didn't need or want him
or anyone other one
to pull them apart
being together would supply all the fun
So the boy walked away
With a new kind of whirl
Of true love, of holding hands
Of the boy and the girl
Author notes
yeahh, this is probably the most random thing i have ever written, and it's sorta bad, but you know, why not?
Purple bunnys like blue frosting *squee*
I edited the akward rhyming thing see whatcha think
A contest entry
- For My Friends ♥ ~ by riasme.
475 points, ended January 9, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thats wonderful! My favorite part was when you turned a boring work into a expressive word with more details. I can Really visualize this in my head! GREAT! I would expext you to get something.
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Good Luck In The Contest!
I don't think it was bad, that was really good! though i don't particularly like rhyming poems this is one of the few I've enjoyed! This is so good i had wished i'd written it first Great job can't wait to see more great poems!!
♥Maddie♥
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HOLY FRIZZNIT!!! I loved it.. It's so sweet. I always think of these things with pictures. And there are always little pictures of Girls and boys who are really like young and such holding hands and or kissing.... Now tell me where the hell were cooties than? Huh where? Cause they don't seem to care.... lol.. This kind of reminded me of Lily and James and Severus, Well huge brain-popping suprise there everything reminds me of harry potter.. But Lily and James were in love and such and Severus was all angry and mean and wanted to throw some sand clumps... Wow.. I LOVED IT!
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ummmm this is really sweet. i liked it it made me happy. and i havent been happy in a while. good job
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awwwwwww so cute!! I see little ethan about to throw rocks and sand at leigh. haha omg!! so funny!! I don't think he would be as forgiving as this little boy. >.< awesome job mah fo shizzle
lise
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OMG THAT IS SOO FUNNY. u know i actually kind of had him in mind when i decided to bring in that character...
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This poem was cute i really liked the fact that its all little kids through the whole poem. The fact that children so cute could really have these feelings but still in this begining stage it makes you wonder. I liked that it rymed but it seemed akward at moments you may want to try to reword a few parts. Over all it was a nice idea and very cute good job
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