The darkness calls when I’m alone,
To tempt me with its lure.
It comes to me when I feel pain,
When I feel insecure.
It tempts me with the things I’ve done,
Bad things so far from proud.
It makes me cry I hate myself,
I scream for death aloud.
I cut myself to change the pain,
From deep emotions hold.
I hide myself inside my mind,
To warm my heart from cold.
I see my blood drip from my shell,
My life blood drains away.
The pain to feel, it makes me real,
The numbness stays at bay.
Chorus
What's wrong with me?
Why do I hate me?
Just can't live with who I am,
Inside mixed up and in a jam.
What's wrong with me?
Why do I hate me?
Author notes
Lyrics to one of my songs.
In a list
A contest entry
- The Painful Side of Life. by November-Dani.
900 points, ended March 1, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Im loving all the entries in this contest. So much emotion, so much feeling.
Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you.
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Very Dark
This write is very honest in the way it talks about suicide. Sometime I get days where I feel like this but now on meds as you know so these days are few and far betweeen
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This is disturbingly beautiful and so well written with vivid imagery that I feel the pain of the words as they softly creep through my head. Well done.
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Very nice! =-)
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I love the rhyming and how well it carries.
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Wow this is rich in sorrow, a wonderful piece, you always seem to get the flow and rhyme spot on...very talented indeed. Wickedly good piece!
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you didnt put the word i said to put or the option youll have to do it or ill DQ you. ill comment better after you do
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sorry, my bad...
this has now been rectified.
cheers,
Fritz...............
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this is soo wonderful. i literally felt it as i was reading it... i love the way it rhymes, i love the content, very very nice job!!!! just perfectly describes the feelings associated with self harm
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I love the emotion. I know how you feel and you did a good job describing it.
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This is just saturated with emotion
I could feel the heartache in your words.
I love to read poetry that makes
me FEEL and this certainly did.
Impressive!!
~Pastel
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G'day Fritz O skennick
Damn.
"I see my blood drip from my shell,
My life blood drains away.
The pain to feel, it makes me real,
The numbness stays at bay."
Such lines that just make the reader numb as to what to say.
Amazing poem
Stay safe
Enjoy AllPoetry
~Amanda
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i like this one too. Again really good use of rhyme
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