Looking at the tombstones, of those who’ve lived and died.
Thinking of their funerals, the people who have cried.
What was it like in their day, was there one like me.
Looking at the tombstones, thinking life is short but free.
All the stones are big and wrote, all of them but one.
Its small and partly buried, it’s a shadow in the sun.
The boy he was a pauper boy, a hero live and dead.
Who sacrificed himself for them, for a bullet in the head.
Looking back the years in time, to see what happened then.
Satan risen up from Hell, and taking souls of men.
This boy he was a fighter, a hero sent from God.
The power of good upon his side, and light shone where he trod.
He set off on his journey, to face the Devil’s wrath.
The darkness came and shrieked its rage, as Satan broke his path.
A rain of fire did scorch the land, his shield his faith in good.
The seas did boil and blood run cold, yet still our hero stood.
The boy brings forth his book of faith, and quotes in Hebrew verse.
And banishes the Evil one, to end this wicked curse.
Demons screech and Angels cry, the boy fulfils his quest.
But Satan’s parting gift to him, ensures he’ll never rest.
Possessed by Demons raging hate, oh fragile mortal mind.
He begs his fellow men to end, his pain bestowed unkind.
They kiss his cheek, perform last rights, with tears in their eyes.
A gun shot echoes through the land, and so our hero dies.
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Comments
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COOL
You really are a poet and a storyteller. Each one I read is so awesome. How long have you been writing?
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Haunting
I love the story, good vs evil
all around us battling for our souls
Amother fantastic write
~Pastel
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Oh wow, this is so sad. A beautifully told tale showing that the real heros often go unnoticed. The imagery is so powerful and I could feel the sorrow coming as I read. Stunning write hunni
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This is awesome and captivating.Thrilling and chilling!!!
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In the third line of the second stanza the repetition of 'boy' is a little distracting...
and the last line also in the second stanza was at first confusing. I think it should be changed to 'with a bullet to the head' rather than 'for'...
while 'for' makes sense after you read it and go back, it should make sense right away with a poem like this.
also, in the last stanza I would personally change the third line's end to 'with tears in ALL their eyes'... but that's up to you.
With as much help as I can give you - Bravo! I very much enjoyed this story. Thanks for the read... -
G'day Fritz O skennick
Wow. From the beginning to the end I was crying with this poem
Stay safe
Enjoy AllPoetry
~Amanda
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