May you continue to soar above clouds
With a swoop below to carry us too
Your voice has been heard, and you should be proud
That you share that golden heart within you
My friend I send you much love and respect
You know how I feel about you my dear
Living so close, as your words do reflect
A wonderful soul within you sincere
May you be blessed with these words I bestow
With a beacon of light, and peace be still
Where you live by example as you show
So many do thirst, their cup you do fill
I appreciate you, my loving sis
And I wish you only pure happiness
Author notes
Much Love And Respect Renee...Always...Peace...
In a list
A contest entry
- Moving on with poetryality - Invited only!!! by Mari Goes.
1400 points, ended October 25, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A beautiful dedication written in love. Your words weave hearts together my friend may you continue in the glory.
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aaarrr what a sweet endearing piece!
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Very sweet. I love that this was written for your sister. Incredibly sincere.
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awesome
you a very wise and great and very organized filled with thoughts.
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WELL DONE
Line#4 and the last line sound maybe just a little awkward...but overall it's really nice...kind of quietly sweet.
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Wow I wish I were your sister! I love your cup metaphor, I have always loved cup metaphors though, ever since I read the Rubyat of Omar Kyam (Oh I destroyed that spelling! Sorry if you are a fan) anyway.
Otherwise the softness your words create is amazing, the informal address just makes it so much more cute and like cuddling feeling. Brill bro!
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AWE!
You are the Master at cheering others up!...Your words are so tender and soft they just warmly caress the heart
...I know she must really love you
...YA! glad you won...PURRRR your Pet
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Great Tribute!
There wa no difficulty in agreeing with you Timothy througout the whole tribute, as poetryality has been an inspiration and encouragement to me from the very beginning on AP. I like" May you continue to soar above clouds with a swoop to carry us too" If anything was expressive of Renee' it is that..Such an inspiration as you are dear Tim..and in love, and peace! Great Tribute!
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forgot your claps!
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This is a blessing in itself
to have someone such as you to compose a poem about them, such person is blessed with the upmost blessings.
Keep on smiling,
Judy
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WOW! As a poem itself, this piece is amazingly penned. Great flow and compassion woven into each line. As a dedication - it is just remarkable! You never cease to amaze me!!!
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Awwwww what a joy to read these tender words Timothy. I know you mean them. I feel the compassion. I know we will see each other as often as possible, living so close. Please understand that I am not gone, just away. I am finding it extremely hard to pull myself away from AP but I know I have to. Thank you for being the kind and loving brother that you are. Thank you for these words that pierce my heart with gentleness. I love you TIM!
Always ♥
Renee
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Just Love Ya!
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I LOVE YOU MORE!
Renee ♥
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Indeed a wonderful show of how friendship touches our heart. The verses are soft, the feelings strong, two of the many qualities we see in our friend Renee.
Thank you for posting it in this contest
Mari
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What a wonderful dedication. Your sonnets get better and better with each one. You have mastered the English sonnet. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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This is a beautiful dedication...and I don't think I have ever read a sonnet by you before...she is very lovely, and you are such a sweet heart too...
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such a lovely and well written poem. you are such a sweetheart
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excellant write
for a most excellant woman.
Good luck in the contest.
Smile,
Judy
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a very lovely dedication.
the first stanza had me relating very well remembering a friend of mine. she is brilliant!
actually the other staza were relatable too. It is so nice to know you know of someone who is so nice and sweet. it is a blessing to have good people around us. we are nothing without them in the long term.
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sweetheart may she and her enchanted spirit shine with your wonderful words for her for you have penned such a beautiful dedication to your friend xxx many loving blessings always xxxx
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Excellent
Awww, this was such a touching and truly exquisite creation. So well done and appropriate from such a great lady. Best of luck in the contest.
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this was a beautiful write that shows admiration and affection for someone you clearly find special to you well done and best of luck
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the admiration you show miss renee ,is a joy to see, she is a very loving soul,thank you for sharing this lovely poem with us,she deserves the recognition..MM
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Thanks for entering the contest. I'm sure your words will hit home to Renee, it's clear she has many friends here on AP.
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No truer words every spoken for Renee is a real gift from heaven...Your words warm my heart and put a little song to my lips...As you have penned the perfect poem I only have one more thing to say...THANK YOU! for sharing that beautiful heart with me
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So very beautifully written, hon
I know this will touch her heart because it was written with YOUR heart
All the best!
Love ya,
Sister Sandy
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