They squeeze me on
in the heat of passion.
All sweaty and excited
clothes off is the fashion.
They're kissing and groping
and fumbling around.
You'd think it was a porno.
Moaning's the only sound.
He thrust me inside
this deep warm hole.
It actually feels kinda nice.
But she is such a fool.
His drunken promises don't mean shit.
He'd promise her the world
as long as he haves some of "it".
He's actually climaxing
I've reached my destination.
But the hole on top of me
just won't prevent gestation.
A few minutes of pleasure.
Nine months of pain
a little bundle of joy
and they argue who's to blame.
I just got used once
and then was thrown away.
But my legacy lives on
as you'll hear them say.
So the moral of this story
pay close attention you see.
Don't risk minutes of pleasure
when there is a hole in me.
A contest entry
- For My Favorites!!! by azlyn.
466 points, ended October 16, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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THANK YOU FOR ENTERING MY CONTEST You must forgive my tardiness as I've had comp issues in judging! Thanks, good luck!!!!!!!!!!
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I will comment once the contest is nearly finished :) best of luck plx comment me :) -midgetbridgey
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definitely different
i loved this! well done on writing about something different from the usual diet of hearts and flowers, loved the sense of realism and how this so captures that moment of passion. great to read from an alternative point of view with a strong message behind it all.the personification is great throughout and thought the lines 'i've reached my destination but the hole on top of me won't prevent gestation'were really effective. well done, this is one of the most original poems i think i've read in a while.
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thank you so much for your kind comment..this is why I write..it is just the best feeling especially when another writer lauds your work..
blessings..
namaste..
r
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Very descriptive, my favorite part was,
I just got used once,
and then thrown away.
its true in more than one aspect -
thanks for sharing! great!
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Ha! this sucks! Not the poem, the poem is great, well penned nicely versed, but the whole idea is just.
SCARY!
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hahaha
i guess that does happen sometimes in life!
a hole in the condom, and a baby months later!
He thrust me inside
this deep warm hole.
It actually feels kinda nice.
But she is such a fool.
His drunken promises don't mean shit.
He'd promise her the world
as long as he haves some of "it".
He's actually climaxing
I've reached my destination.
But the hole on top of me
just won't prevent gestation.
A few minutes of pleasure.
Nine months of pain
a little bundle of joy
and they argue who's to blame.
haha
mike, aka jonathan wikkins
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thanx for the kind comment..Mike..
namaste,
robin
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Witty
A very witty and funny poem.
Good luck!
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Hahaha very wittily written I have to say! A condom's perspective - that's a new one!
A few minutes of pleasure.
Nine months of pain
a little bundle of joy
and they argue who's to blame.
Classic. Nine months of pain. Then a lifetime of agony!!!
"my legacy lives on" - haha that's great.
And a message that people should actually listen to!
Thank you for entering my contest and congratulations on the bronze
Take care and good luck! x
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this has a trophy no trophy pre writes only!
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Too funny
Too true as well!
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Clever and I guess funny in a tragic way - this could be excellent with some editing, that said I am surrpsied to see this from you, it's another angle that I did not imagine.
Has some excellent themes, thought, a real life piece. I'd like to see more of this kind of thing, there is real diversity here.
James
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LOL this is very clever
and so funny...A talking condom,
who'd of thunk it..
Great write!
~Pastel
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hahahahaha!
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lol OMGosh this made me laugh... My father always said it was easier in than it came out...
lol but hey it is the truth...you highlighted a lot of seriousness with laughter, I like that ...you owned it and made it your own. best to you in the contest...this one has my vote!
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*dies laughing* wow. that is funny. that made me giggle. great write. this is something great and WONDERFUL. hehe.
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Oh SHIT!!! I am loving this...a talking condom. And a wise one at that!!! People do not realize what they are risking at a time like this. A human life is in the balance...and I think only those of us who have experienced such a heartbreaking thing can take this as seriously as it should be taken. Dang...this says a lot! Thanks my dear...I am sooooooooooo impressed!!!
Love~
Suzan
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