What will they think of this infectious inertia?
A furious engagment with the silent mind.
A divorce from this half of my heart from the other.
Oh, a fluid fairy made from nothing more then dreams!
My emancipation from the interlocked attention spans of my skin,
A dizzy angel, weightless and hopeless, falls back again.
In a harsh thud of realism, charred away from the feathers,
Fading from the orange skies and the chorus.
Just like the autumn leaves fall from some form of grace,
I am humble but to join them.
Falling with the opinions,
they're always quick to follow.
I've gone to every single lecture today,
Won't you pass me in the finals?
Author notes
Water cant be held (for long) in the human hand.
At the moment, this is a description of me and my life!
A contest entry
- A Forest of words by this is a war.
600 points, ended November 20, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Can you dissolve this?
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nice imagery and metaphoric symbolism written here with that said i will say best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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this is my favorite poem of yours thus far. i would actually remove the last two lines though. i think the poem already is superb without them. you are such an excellent writer; i'd love for you to enter a contest of mine some time.
by any chance have you ever heard of cocorosie? if not, you may want to check them out. your writing is a unique blend that seems a tad like them. though, yours comes off more understandable. but yeah, great stuff. we'll have to talk more some time. dusty
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you had to metion lectures and finals didn't you. xx
As always, your imagery is so vivid, the symbols are going only slightly over my head becasue I'm in zombie mode, but they're so dame pretty and I love the water metaphor, classic.
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you just keep getting better,it scares me.too wonderful,you nevr let down.xxx
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Oh i really like this theme of the temporary grip of water and how it relates,very clever mdear!
Fabulous dahling x
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