The sun peeps through the Autumn trees,
the leaves float to the ground.
Browning, drying, Summer dieing,
they drift without a sound.
Discarded on a Winter breeze,
that chills us to the bone.
In contrast to the peeping sun,
And all that Spring has grown.
We wrap up warm to fight the cold,
as flu and colds begin.
For now it’s time for Winter’s hold,
as aches and pains set in.
Underfoot, an icy patch,
Reminds our waking mind,
How fragile, we as mortal men,
Can be to Winter’s bind.
To dark, so cold, so weak and meek,
a slave to season’s cast.
So wet and drained, we look ahead,
to when the Winter’s passed.
Bring on Springtime, Summer’s sun,
Warm my soul inside.
I sit before the fireplace,
so cold by warmth denied.
I rub my hands, my fingers numb,
I’m chilled unto the bone.
So now comes Christmas shopping time,
back to the cold we’re thrown.
In a list
A contest entry
- Electrify the Autumnal Spirit Within by FunnelWaxFate.
900 points, ended November 16, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seasons... [prewrites permitted] =] by sora..
600 points, ended September 20, 2008, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - -SPING/SUMMER/WINTER/AUTUMN-season contest-PW allowed- by Heva Feva.
675 points, ended October 15, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is so cool! I really like this bit:
"Discarded on a Winter breeze,
that chills us to the bone.
In contrast to the peeping sun,
And all that Spring has grown."
One thing I would change... Perhaps you could seperate it into stanzas.
Congratulations! You're a finalist!
Thank you so much for entering my contest, I love your poem! Good luck...
-heva
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Tis done... 
Something I've been meaning to do for a while...
Take care
Fritz..........
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Wow I loved this! I am too ready for the cold and snow to go away and for Spring to appear. Your words flowed effortlessly across the page such vivid imagery. Thanks for sharing your talent with me, hugs Theresa
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beatiful
enchanting write, very " light"
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I really liked this one, it certainly made me smile at the end. You have a great rhyme scheme going here too, your words are delicate, like mankind itself. Great stuff. sj
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we are, indeed, fragile creatures.
beautiful.
good work + good luck!
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While reading this beautiful piece, I felt as if I were in an environment full of lyricism. I heard the cataracts singing, the breeze blowing, the birds chirping. The natural flow of the poem is extremely impressive and amazing. The images are so vivid, so beautifully tangible:
'I rub my hands, my fingers numb, I'm chilled unto the bone.' Splendid!
Rahi
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I love this
the imagery is so picturesque
like a video in my head-
I saw.
Love this!
~Pastel
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oh, marvelous write! This is truly masterful. The dismal dreariness of it is most effective. Very insightful. I particularly liked the lines, “We wrap up warm to fight the cold, as flu and colds begin.
For now it’s time for Winter’s hold, as aches and pains set in.
Underfoot, an icy patch, Reminds our waking mind,
How fragile, we as mortal men, Can be to Winter’s bind.” So very true. It definitely is relatable to all those in climes of harsh winters; this poem really reminds me of those times rather vividly. Written very expertly, this write is grasping and portrayed with excellent imagery, tone, and emotion. It really captures that human spirit as well as the fragility and sort of victimization felt in those cold and bitter times; that depression and hostility felt due to the restrictions winter brings; that caged feeling, and that longing for spring and summer, to feel capable again, to feel invincible and agile, free, instead of crumpled and near crippled by the hardships of winter. Very thought provoking, very well done!
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really great poem i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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