Sensuous images as I lie upon the autumn ground
I am being tempted into oblivion, my heart is beginning to pound
I am fluid, and melting into the hues
Temptation is exciting, Breathing is heavy,
anticipation is what I choose!
Is the serpent calling me, speaking in an undertone
His voice sleek and assuring,its me and him alone
He says "Take a chance, be bold,
Take the apple made of gold"
God knows that when you eat it, you will know good from bad
How Sad!
As apples of gold in silver carvings is a word spoken right
But our entire heritage was mislead, only death was in sight.
Beautiful, perfect was our mother Eve
In this beautiful picture was she meant to deceive,
Author notes
A biblical quote, ultra sensitive and true
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It is true and wonderfully written, but how does it apply to you?
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Does it not apply to us all?
Love light and peace
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True we all live our lives stained and no matter
what our spiritual path; must find a way to blend
our colour with that of peace. Peace found in
our acceptance of ourselves and grace in learning
lessons that will blend our stains to shades of
humanity and love.
I will note that the colours used are not those
highlighted within the theme and the quote does
not seem to fit your verse filled with personal
choice and revelation.
Blue
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For starters, this piece holds some of the most exquisite imagery I have seen, and felt, for a very long time.
Secondly, it has very deep meaning, and a lot of ambiguities as well I feel, making references to the way people feel today, and our society, as well as linking it to the creation story which is very clever, and a good idea because that's how we started and this is how we are now.
A beautiful piece!
ELW x
ps. Thankyou for your comment, I really appreciate it
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Oh you ahve touched on something that is very dear to my heart... how stained we are with apple on our lips to this society at large... to begin with such stain..how does one ever wash it off? Well done.
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I am so deeply touched
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