I walk among you mortal men,
The ages pass me by.
From blood soaked hands, to war strewn lands,
I feed on those who die.
Before they take their final breath,
The blood still warm inside.
To feed my raging hunger pangs,
Before the shell has died.
It saddens me to see a world,
Where such as I may roam.
With memories of ancient days,
To far to call my home.
I live and breathe by twilight shades,
I walk denied by all.
My skin no more shall know the sun,
Until my time to fall.
My soul is torn, for those who mourn,
The souls who wait for death.
They feed me life, and end their strife,
Until their final breath.
To justify this way of life,
A balance must be drawn.
Perceive ye mortal cattle men,
And bless the souls, I mourn.
So when its time to judge my sins,
Of life and lust partaken.
I know inside, when life’s denied,
My soul shall be forsaken.
Author notes
This Poem is from my Gothic Tales CD, to hear it, go to http://www.archive.org/details/AgelessHunger
BG from http://latestwindowswallpaper.com/wp-content/uploads/2008/04/6708-1194286496-vampp2.jpg
Pic from http://farm2.static.flickr.com/1168/1236268788_0f24a41d0f_o.jpg
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A contest entry
- Mythology, (With a Twist!) Contest and Creative Writing Workshop by kareneisenlord.
900 points, ended March 16, 2008, 39 entries
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550 points, ended November 13, 2008, 29 entries
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1000 points, ended February 14, 32 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Excellent
impressive as alawys
love the write you have penned
love this stanza...
Before they take their final breath,
The blood still warm inside.
To feed my raging hunger pangs,
Before the shell has died.
welcome to the finalist
thanks for the share
Darky
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Haha Of course I'd find you in this contest.
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Wow wow wow and even if I repeat myself wow again
This is so very great I love it just love it again
You know I love vamps and dear igf you ever plan to write a book
Write about that
It is more then fantastic
I would love to be that great
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Wonderful sinister feel to this. I think it's absolutely flawless in rhyme and flow, and the word choices add to the ominous feel. Kind of gave me shivers, cause I got to thinking this could be a vampyre's like death chant or something... like what his victims might here in the distance through the night.
I think this was my fave stanza
I live and breathe by twilight shades,
I walk denied by all.
My skin no more shall know the sun,
Until my time to fall.
It just seems so original to me. Great write
Thanks for entering and good luck! -
wicked
my skin no more shall know the sun
until my time to fall
as always fritz.....amazing xxx
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I liked the last stanza the best. I enjoy the rhyme of foresaken and partaken. Nice job, thank you for entering the contest.
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Wow this is beautifully and darkly written. I love the imagery invoked with this read and the sinister feeling behind every word. Marvelous job.
♥ Kathraina -
wow this is rlly kool i love it. =]
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Just love this one!
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Wonderful piece. The flow is perfect, so smooth. Your rhyme is, as usual, flawless..... such a hard thing to do, yet you never fail.
Your words are penned with such feeling and emotion, reading them always puts me right in the mind of each narrator......
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Wow - loved the wording and images in this!! Flawless flow made this a pleasure to read, and your wording and story - awesome!
Congrats on the well-deserved Gold.
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Wow hun
Loved this one
The flow of words the rhyme and the general thoughts that spill
Well done on gold and your clean sweep of the board
Julie
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I love the picture it's really does your poem proud. You are a very talented and creative writer. The rhyme is fantastic absoulutly speechless from reading your piece so powerful I don't need to say good luck because I am sure your poem is a WINNER!
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awesome, i love this, good job and good luc
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whoa. Just like. I loved it. It was brilliant!
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This showed a possible perspective of a vampire quite eloquently, and the ultimate tragedy and demise that they must face. You drive this point home exquisitely at the end of your poem;
"To justify this way of life,
A balance must be drawn.
Perceive ye mortal cattle men,
And bless the souls, I mourn.
So when its time to judge my sins,
Of life and lust partaken.
I know inside, when life’s denied,
My soul shall be forsaken."
One feels the remorse and regret here, but that there is no salvation. Intense.
Thank you for your entry and best wishes to you!
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A wonderful dark piece...very well penned!
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Ah, such poetry in your words, you painted exquisit pictures with your words. I felt the sorrow of the creature, and yet I felt his passion and hunger as well. Your flow was remarkable, and you picked the best words to describe the feeling that you wanted to convey. Lovely, and powerful. Wonderful job.
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Ageless hunger!
I love this, you took me
to the mind of the immortal
and forsaken...
You have a way of bringing these
tales to life..
Love it!
~Pastel
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Hi Pastel,
thank you for you kind words, they are very much appreciated as always.
If you liked this one check out 'Prince Charming' 'tis another Vampyre tale. Also check out 'Death and denial' 'tis a nice little ghost story in same style.
Thanks again,
cheers,
Fritz..................
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Thanks for your entry
Another that reminds me of Interview with a Vampire. Nice flow and structure. The rhyme had good rhythm and didn't feel forced.
Happy Halloween
Tammy
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impressive
i liked da flow of it. lol quote the raven never more lol
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Wow! That was written so well..the flow was perfect! Absoulutly amazing write..I loved it. Thanks for entering and good luck
Avec amour *~Krymsin Kyss~* -
Welcome to AllPoerty
G'day Fritz
Whoa! This write certainly made the hairs on the back of my neck stand up.
Creepy and compelling all at the same time !
Powerful and beautiful in it's own right
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
Enjoy AllPoetry
~Amanda
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