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I Want To Be a Dancer, Too

See that dancer over there?
Pretty tutu, pretty hair.
Mommy, she has pretty shoes!
I want to be a dancer, too.

Mommy, I can do ballet!
See me twirl and relevé.
Now I want her pretty shoes
So I can be a dancer, too.

Mommy, I work really hard
In my tights and leotard.
My toes hurt from those pretty shoes,
But now, I am a dancer, too.

Mommy, see me over there?
On the stage, with pretty hair.
I am in my pretty shoes
And now, I am a dancer, too.

Mommy, see that pretty girl?
The one who tiptoes, skips, and twirls?
Mommy, see her pretty shoes?
I think I’ll be a dancer, too.

Author notes

yaay i hope this is alright. I am 12 and I love to dance, but i wouldn't necessarily want to do it as a living, but I want to be a dancer. I take ballet 12 hours a week.

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all the stanzas up till the last one is me talking, but the last one represents all the little girls who want to be ballerinas, too.

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  • emo me
    September 2
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    amazing!

    i do ballet too. i remember thinking like in the first and second stanzas when i was little and first wanted to be a dancer.


  • Sieannie
    May 3

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    Cool

    I am also 12 and a ballet dancer. I hope to be a profesional dancer when I am older. I do ballet and urban lessons 3-4 times a week. I love to dance too and I like your poem. I live in New Zealand.


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 11, 2008

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    this is so cute. I think we've all been there. I still am that little girl that wants to be the beautiful dancer. But my parents thought I would quit that too... arg. lol
    nice poem.

    Dani


  • Wydra
    March 6, 2008

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    loooooove it

    hey sasha! im a dancer so i know what it was like as a kid, waiting for ur turn to be a star. this poem is exactly it, a story of dreams come true!


  • liduen silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    *poke* Hi Sasha! I never realized you were on this site before...I should have realizes since Lise is... Awesome poem, I like how natural the rhyming is, especially since I can't rhyme for my life.


  • TwilightWolf
    November 4, 2007
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    I like it


  • Kari gold member
    October 10, 2007
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    This was good with a lot of imagery


  • LuckyBlackCat
    October 9, 2007

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    hey sasha, really great poem! I like the different perspectives that you show, in this piece. see, you aren't the stupidest person on earth! *chuckle*
    ilu!
    kathryn ~ dubbed "it"


  • Faeryn
    October 8, 2007

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    awesome poem, Sasha. my little sister is very much like you; she loves to dance. she does around 20-30 hours a week. I really love the second stanze. keep up the great work!
    -Tay-


  • DeadlyTurnip
    October 8, 2007

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    That was so sweet! It's really purtty. I loved every word of it. The last stanza was my favorite, with the idea of the cycle going on. GREAT JOB!


  • riasme
    October 8, 2007

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    awwwwwwwwwwww love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love loooooooooove this poem!!! and yes I will give you some cheerios for yummy. how many points do you have?? I think I had 5000 until I did that contest.

    lise

    P.S. HI. Steve Irwin was one of the bestest men who ever graced this planet and blah blah blah blha (wt..?)

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