You don't think she's real.
The rest of us think your crazy.
I thought you were gonna be her meal.
You just called me lazy.
We all stand by the door.
You walk to the mirror.
I scream "I can't watch no more!",
and someone,not me, runs away in terror.
I say before you start, "Are you sure?"
You signal me to be quiet.
You start to turn around and call her.
You say nothing happend and tell me to try it.
I shakely walk up to the mirror.
I do the whole routine.
I was then either stuck with fear or,
I was dead.
The bloody hands grab my neck,
I can't breath!
I fell like a wreck,
and I heard the bell.
I thought I was going to hell!!!
A contest entry
- Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary Ages 13/younger by Judo.
470 points, ended October 26, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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Great entry - thanks and best of luck.
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wel i personally dont care for spelling & i think its really good
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Wonderbandalice is right, you definetly need help with spelling grammar errors. Great usage of rhyming though. But I am going to have to ask you to edit this poem, or I am going to have to remove it from the contest. You have 13 days to get it edited. So do it soon, or you'll be removed from the contest. God luck in the contest anyways!
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You REALLY need to edit this for spelling and grammatical errors, and it mostly doesn't scan. With some fixing up, it could be good though. Maybe.
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