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October sighs around the eaves

And wakes in me such contemplation

Of passing years and falling leaves.

 

'Twas spring that birthed gnarled twisting vine,

And summer nurtured growing grape,

But she, who pressed the precious wine.

 

She paints the mountains, Monet's hues

Their craggy peaks are now infused,

Violet and rose to subtle blues.

 

Her phantom mists dance on the wold

Like Will O Wisp in memories

That neither mind nor hand can hold.

 

With fickle moods she'll cause despair,

For in her lies a cruel streak

Too well I know her frosty glare.

 

Then she will change, perhaps a whim

To mimic summer's balmy days

Though sun will wear a hazy rim.

 

She breathes the wind to stir the leaves

That swirl for her in jocund dance;

This, the gardener often peeves.

 

Her beauty is of russet golds

Shrouded in a misty veil

That under pallid sun unfolds.

 

But can my autumn be as fair

As this tenth month of closing year?

My breath escapes like quiet prayer.

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  • Frogzter gold member
    November 11

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    Stunning! What a beautiful piece chock full of imagery. Perfect rhyme and flow. What more can be said than already has been? It's shining array of gold and silver speaks for itself. Thanks for entering and best wishes,

    Frogz~

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 2

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    this is beautiful. Congratulations on all of your previous contest entries and thank you for entering mine. Your previous wins were well deserved.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 31

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    This is a beautiful penning, so worthy of all its glittering chalices. Good luck in the contest, my Friend.





  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 25

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    Masterpiece To Read!

    Without seeing your trophies, I knew this was trophy material...Your imagery, flow, and rhyme...So perfectly delightful and meaningful!


  • Danna Hobart
    January 23

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    Even though the contest is anonymized, I could recognize your writing, Di. Very few people are as skilled at writing rhyme as you are.

    I liked this from the first two words. I was born in October, and I think the words "October sighs" are so fitting a way to embody it.

    Your second stanza made me remember all the years I worked in the grape industry in Upstate New York.

    I could go on and on. Each and every stanza is filled with nostalgia for me.

    Thank you for entering.


  • suseann
    January 12
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    Good grief this has legs of it's own to dance timelessly in the annals of true poetry. And apparently not just my own humble opinion! Wow! You've run so colorfully in poetic descriptiveness in verse here just like rained upon and running water colors.It so aptly decries the bent and persona of October.


  • Rhythm Child
    January 3

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    thankyou for entering. I hope you enjoy the contest and have fun.

    take care
    message me for anything

    Rhythm Child


  • AsIThink gold member
    December 31, 2008
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    Your imagery and imagination are wonderful. This was such a colorful piece (loved the pic by the way). Too many good parts to pick out...well, this closing sealed the whole thing for me:

    "But can my autumn be as fair

    As this tenth month of closing year?

    My breath escapes like quiet prayer."

    Great job with this.

    AsIThink...


  • ASmileForYou
    December 16, 2008
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    This is absolutely beautiful. I love it!
    Thanks for entering!

  • PianoMan
    November 28, 2008

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    Wow. This is a beautiful poem. I really love the fall because it's not too cold and it's not too hot either and the whole world has been painted in majestic colors. The picture you put with this poem is amazing. Great job and thanks for entering my contest!


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    November 12, 2008
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    This poem is lush and gentle and uses interesting language. I can see from the lists of awards that other contest judges agree with me on the merits of this piece. Since your name was included in the author's notes I know I will have something wonderful to read in the next round. Peace, Liz


  • Cool Jew
    November 2, 2008

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    You did a great job describing the feeling that the month of October evokes-- the personification of the month combined with your imagery results in a very enjoyable poem. I also really admired your use of iambic tetrameter; your measured lines fit in perfectly with your depiction of the month.

    My only criticism is that the ending felt a bit abrupt (though I did enjoy the last line).

    Very nice read. Good luck in the contest!

    -CJ


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    November 2, 2008
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    Perfect images, perfect rhyme, perfect rhythm - ahhhh a vision held in words. Absolutely perfect. I have missed reading your beautiful poetry. This is simply a treasure. ~Pamela


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    September 19, 2008
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    Adding clappies!

    Az


  • Meroza
    September 15, 2008

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    This poem is so beautiful, your words are like a golden paint brush. Painting love and care on a blank paper. Creating art!

    Thank you for sharing


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    JUST AS ABOUT AS BEAUTIFUL AS THEY GET,
    YOUR PIECE HAS REACHED OT AND GRAB MY DOUL.
    i CAN SEE WHY YOU WON SO MANY TROPHIES.

    THANK YOU I WISH YOU LUCK IM THR

    lOVEANDBLESSINGS2U & AND AND EVERYONE
    Z; jOUCE


  • malmadre gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    I see why this one has so many shining triumphs attached. Well done! I love the mention of Monet..it's a breathtaking endeavor! with an apt ending..my breath escapes like quiet prayer. Excellent!


  • Elisabeth Strange
    September 9, 2008
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    Absolutely breathtaking! Best wishes in the contest!

  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    Stunning and so lovely! Pretty painting of the Autumn lanscape in your words...I love the pic you chose...so fitting and so serene. Thanks for the entry!


    Az


  • aboomer silver member
    September 7, 2008
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    This is beautiful and well-deserving of all the trophies on it!
    best wishes in the contest.


  • just mercedes gold member
    April 5, 2008

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    Beautiful and evocative poem. On this side of the equator, this is an April poem, and my autumn just begins. So lovely to read this today, thank you.


  • BellaD
    April 5, 2008

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    Gorgeous Verse!

    Beautifully written. I almost feel like raking leaves, but it's not quite the season! Very well written. Thank you for this entry.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 1, 2008

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    Jings, you'll need a whole shelf for this one poem! What a lovely, lyrical piece of work it is too. Congratulations.


  • tomisb
    March 27, 2008

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    What can I say that the trophies haven't. Perhaps, beneath the idyll to fall is a sad and open call to being touched and changed by one that loves and does not remain. The most fickle seasons spring and fall, they are cut short by over extended stays of winter and summer or cut short when another season begins to soon, these tweener seasons, subtle full of the hints of passion and extremes but not quite full, just hints and memories. Beautiful piece so nicely seductive and sensual heat.
    Love, Tom B.


  • SurelyWritten
    March 27, 2008

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    Wow, congrats on all the trophies, for this work of beauty they are well deserved! A nature poem, that is not cliche, with rhyme that is neither forced or over-used. I am shock! I didn't expect to see something this well written.

    The meter is almost flawless with only a couple lines stepping out, and the rhyme is very well worded. Excellent!

    I really have nothing bad to say about this, which is such a pity because I started this contest thinking I was going to have to be very mean!

    This is so well done, I read it three times through, and I am very impressed... I will remember this write when I judge.


    I am asking that everyone in the contest send me a message or respond to my comment telling my why they chose the particular poem they entered, for my contest. Only contestants that do this will be eligible for winning when it comes time for judging.

    Thanks for entering,
    Shirley

    (A more critical review may follow during judging, but no applauses will be given to any entry, even the ones that deserve them.)


    • masterblaster gold member
      March 28, 2008
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      Hi, first thank you for our lovely comment, as to the reason I posted this one was, I am normally a rhyming poet who dabbles in free verse, and reading your comments made me smile about rhyme, there are a few very serious rhyming poets here on AP, I hope they join in this contest, for me rhyme will never die it is a bit like certain breeds of dogs, their popularity subsides for a while then returns stronger than before. A strange simile? perhaps, lol, all the best with your contest, Di


  • Elfin
    March 25, 2008
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    This is beautiful Di, a very captivating piece. Well done my friend. Val


  • And Hyetal
    March 24, 2008

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    This is a really lovely poem. It really painted a picture of this month. Nice imagery and I like how you personified October.

    Sorry for taking so long to judge.

    Thank you for entering.

    ~Cassie


  • Never Fall in Love
    March 9, 2008

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    This is beautfully penned. I'm not much of a nature fa, but when I see a good on - I know it's excellent. Once again, well deserving of the trophies - congrats

    Never ♥


  • paullallady silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    What a beautiful poem of nature and that special time of year. I love how you personalized the month, and made us really relate to "her". good job on this and good luck in the contest.


  • Angel Of Heaven99
    February 22, 2008

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    beautifully written and the rhyme and imagery is just wonderful. I enjoyed this very much and thanks for entering!


  • Metaphorist
    February 7, 2008
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    This seems to be winning all these contests. I can see why. Thanks for entering.


  • Deus Proteje
    January 16, 2008

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    Fantastic

    A stellar first entry, and hopefully an indication of what is to come. If this is the standard, competition will be very stiff.

    Good luck in my contest, keep on writing.

  • Bad Bill
    January 16, 2008
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    A beautiful poem, Di, and definitely a worthy winner! Congratulations.

    Bill


  • Blueskywonder
    January 14, 2008
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    A stunning piece of poetry!

    Great!


  • Demington
    January 14, 2008

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    Good show!

    A very, very cultured view I must say. The language is exquisite! This is an accomplished bit of work friend. I commend you.

    Some of the rhyme bordered on what I identify as nursery rhyme style, but I feel quit confident that you managed to avoid this regrettable rhyme scheme with the power of your language.

    wold, pallid, russet, mimic, whim, fickle, will o wisp, subtle, craggy…Monet’s hues, I liked that one quite a bit. Just wonderful…

    Blessings,

    C

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    November 12, 2007

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    Congratulations!!

    Well OH MY I can see why a beautiful gold trophy adorns this most wonderful ode. A pleasure to have read and enjoyed this piece. Absolutely Superb! Heartfelt congratulations on your wind. Just wonderful. ~Pamela


  • MargaretG
    November 11, 2007
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    Congratulations!


  • myrataal silver member
    November 11, 2007
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    Wondrous ...

    gold ... X


  • Lyndon gold member
    November 11, 2007

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    Beautiful, almost mellifluous tercets

    tumble into Fall via the glory of October. "She" is a month that is truly feminine with a mind and mood of her own.
    Thank you for entering.
    Lyndon.


  • RuthKephart
    November 7, 2007

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    How wonderful it has been to see you grow into your own as a poet...this could hold a flag to any piece I've seen on this site. What beautiful visions and lovely words are captured here
    Ruth


  • Mystical-Gardenia
    November 5, 2007

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    Magnificent!! Beautifully orchestrated!!

    A palate of images as colorful as fall; and most certainly as her many moods... absolutely brilliant

    Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors

  • MargaretG
    October 9, 2007

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    I'm very impressed with the progression of images in stanza 2, wonderful. The poem is quite lovely in "fickle moods" of this month of changing weather. I noticed a few little typos, but not to detract from the movement of this sweet poem.

    • masterblaster gold member
      October 9, 2007
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      Hi, many thanks, think I have fixed the oops,lol, trying to type in a hurry, a bad habit of mine, can you give it the once over if you have a moment? again many thanks, hugs


  • janejainejayne gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    Brava!

    You captured October and hold her captive with your words...dear Di, this is incredibly and hauntingly beautiful! 'My breath escapes like quiet prayer'
    How wonderful you are! Jane


  • Tarja
    October 9, 2007

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    I love October and with this piece you completely captured the essence of fall! You should have th gold for sure! With you vivid imagery and the perfect picture. Good luck.... not that you need it!


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    October 8, 2007
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    Beautiful October poem full of vivid, beautiful images! Good luck in the contest!

  • Lady Dragonwyck
    October 8, 2007

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    Oh, my...you are so creative and this is so beautiful. I really enjoyed this Nature Walk and really enjoyed the line about the gardner being peeved at swirling leaves!!! Good luck in this contest.

    Lady D


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    Wonderful picture to serve with this write - liked the form, the flow and the images created through your words. Interesting rhythm and rhyme used throughout as well.

  • suseann
    October 8, 2007

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    Excellent verse of contemplation on Oct. and a new style in form I'm unfamilar with.It works it's wonders in voice to the reader.

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