You are a leech.
I had to pull you from my flesh.
suckers deep,
penetrating down to the marrow core,
Drained,
my veins are hollow,
Collapsing,
please take more,
take the Memory,
take the Truth,
take my beating empty heart,
but all you took: tissue and blood.
You drained me.
The heart that did only beat for you
found a new rhythm,
the blood that was lost
is now freshly flowing through
my veins. I push forward
into the dimly lit future
of MY life. Alone.
Forgive me.
For there is not integrity in theses lies,
the love that I have suffered,
the abuse that I have enjoyed,
I dig my nails into my thigh,
it feels good just to feel.
Touch my skin.
I want to see if the pain will be the same,
to put you back on my body,
my rib cage,
right below my left breast,
to tasted my rejuvenated flesh,
To see if you still are
that parasite.
Then I remember the definition of
Insanity.
In a list
This is a work in progress. I would love any feedback you have for me.
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it was just so-so for me and then the last line made the entire poem..."then i remember the definition of insanity"...that's a brilliant thought
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OMG! I love this! My ex-fiance was so much like this also . . . after draining my laughter, my smile, my heart and my bank account, he couldn't keep going and drain from me the memories of our relationship. Regarding your poem, this is powerful. The diction is casual, but it helps to clarify the tone toward the subject. I have never been a fan of center alignment, but that is just my opinion - you chose it for a reason. The last line fits well, but I'm not sure if you want to keep it that way, since it has become an over-used phrase and has turned cliche. I look forward to watching how you develop this poem.
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This is an awesome description of wanting something you know is not good for you, and the perserverance it takes to let go of that compulsion.
"suckers deep,
penetrating down to the marrow core,
Drained,
my veins are hollow,
Collapsing,
please take more,
take the Memory,
take the Truth"
Really very lovely, and easy to relate to. Well done.
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This sent chills running through my mind. The details in this poem is incredible and insanity really fits it perfect. Very well done here.
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Wonderful struggle.
That has got to be one of your betters. At least it runs through my favored taste buds. I've watched your internal struggle over time, and this voices it nicely.
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Wonderful struggle
Thank you Jason. I will continue to work on this one because I think it has the potential to be great. Will you be around during the holidays?
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