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Thursday

I felt cheap after the train on Thursday,
possibly cheaper knowing we should have slept;
your arms so much more satisfying
than sex for the sake of sex.


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I don't know - this is what happens to be on my mind. I'll probably come back to this in a little while.

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  • PurpleAnarch
    November 12, 2007

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    your reply to someone's comment... slurred out in repetition, yes... the alliteration helps.
    but anyway... I really get this one, and specifically relate to it.


  • Annalise
    October 13, 2007

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    Last line kicks ass. Really.

    Nice little poem you have here.

  • vertigo beat
    October 13, 2007

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    Loved it; especially the last two line. I do, however, think that you can change around the third line a little bit; make it "prettier" (for lack of a better word at the moment-I just woke up...).


    • sca
      October 13, 2007
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      I didn't mean for it to be pretty as such, "sex" has such weight and almost sinful connotations, the kind of word slured out in repetition.

      But, yes, I can see what you mean,
      => Jess