Do not look upon me for I am broken
Do not touch my skin for I am cut and bleeding
Do not pick up the pieces for there are too many to tell
Do not sweep me off my feet for I am now a worthless shell
Do not try to fix me for I will never be the same
Walk away and forget this ever happened
Leave me were I lay scattered on the floor
Black and blue, bleeding and cring
Shaking and broken like the glass shards I have broken.
A contest entry
- The Pain Still Seeps Inside by Leanna-bean.
375 points, ended May 15, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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I agree I think it need some work...My favorite lines where the only two that rhymed. It doesn't seem to flow very well. Don't get me wrong it's a very powerful piece but it could be so much better. Thank you so much so the entry and good luck!
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i like it but i think it needs some work. like i would try rhyming it bc i think it would be fairly easy to do. unless thats not your style. i think it has potential
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