Satin lace pink ribbons bliss
with a ripple of soft touch
in ecstasy of a soft music
Ripening like tulip buds
that springs in gardens of
liberty whispering harmony
.....life dances......
with such a vibrant freedom
With freedom
Doves in prisons chirps
humming their happy songs
....once unlocked.....
they flew higher
Soaring like never before
Such was the state
when they were uncaged
When they were uncaged
Summer overtook Winter
daffodils bloomed
melting the snow
Sun shines with rays of
.....new hope.....
drawing colors of rainbows
the heaven seems to celebrate
once they were independent
once they were independent
School girls in frocks
began to sizzle and giggle
with laugher and joy
as never before
opening their wings
..like butterflies..
Author notes
based on freedom of women
A contest entry
- A Forest of words by this is a war.
600 points, ended November 20, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I would say this is very well done and has a good message to it. thanks for sharing this. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Thanks heavenscent4U I like your user name.Nice
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With freedom
Doves in prisons chirps
humming their happy songs
....once unlocked.....
they flew higher
Soaring like never before
Such was the state
when they were uncaged- this is my fav para and this para is what the whole poem is about.. well done
i seem to notice that ur found of flowers as ur choice is very gracefull and beautiful as i only read two poems but both had flowers as symbol
best of luck in the contest.. this is a very descent and a worthy entry
abuyi
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Thanks abuyi...Yeah you are right I love flowers alot.Specially lotus.I guess you read the Lotus flower of hope poem.
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ur welocme.. well i read { A Farewell of Sacrifice }.. well now i m plaining to read the lotus poem after lunch..
keep the ink flowing
abuyi
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btw...All the Best for the contest...
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beautiful
hey....its a masterpiece...i loved the first three openin lines..ur piece really bowled me over...ur metaphors r too good...the way u have compared women to tulip buds, uncaged doves...is simply WOW!! u have used repetition also very skilfully...after this piece i m in love with ya n ur writin..tc
PARTH.
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Is it Parth.. if this poem is that good I want to win a gold trophy.Even then comments are more appreciated
thanks
First verse is actually a imagined one.
Satin lace pink ribbons is used to describe women.And the whole poem describes a women in different ways.feminism is not a topic I write poems for.But this one is inspired from my personal life.
tc
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