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Pains in My Heart [Quatern]

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Overwhelming pains in my heart

You’re gone when I need you the most

How could you leave me all alone?

Drowning in tears now that you’re gone

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Everyday, we said, “I Love you!”

Overwhelming pains in my heart

Why did you leave without a word?

Crying on my pillow each night

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I pray staring at the heavens

Please let us meet again one day

Overwhelming pains in my heart

Now that you’re gone, I want to die

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You were the one that held my heart

You would not tell me all you’re pains

Why did you take your own life? Why!

Overwhelming pains in my heart

Author notes

Picture # 5

Quatern

A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains. It is similar to the Kyrielle
and the Retourne. It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain. The first line of
stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza
four. A quatern has eight syllables per line. It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme
scheme.

line 1
line 2
line 3
line 4

line 5
line 6 (line 1)
line 7
line 8

line 9
line 10
line 11 (line 1)
line 12

line 13
line 14
line 15
line 16 (line 1)

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  • awannabepoet
    October 17, 2007

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    Very touching and excellent form indeed, I like this style and will have to try it one day. A slightly different take on the picture than me but in the same direction.

    I will have to look at more of your poems.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    October 17, 2007

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    Oh I love this
    You are truely a form wizard...
    Well done with that pic. Profound writing for
    a profound pic. Thank you for entering my
    contest.


    delila

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    October 8, 2007

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    Sadly having seen this done, I did see the ending coming sadly... amazing writing hun as always....

    You take care now

    Kaz


  • Andi. gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    Wow David! I loved this muchly!
    As Manda said, I didnt see the suicide coming at the end either!
    Good luck in the contest!

    Love ur sis in law

    ♥ Dani


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 8, 2007

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    My Angel ♥

    This is a beautifully tragic poem; I did not see the suicide coming at the end

    Stunning and creative. Well penned for this picture

    BEST of luck in the contest
    Stay safe
    I love you
    ~Manda ♥

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