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Burning Up

 

Burning Up

By: Julia L. Clark

 

 

 

I’m sweating in tears of missing you

Please come taste my shaking sincere

Of I am burning up I am so hot

I am running a fever of a temperature of

I miss you

I am hurting in pain of your ER.

its been 48 hours since we touched

One day since I looked in to your eyes and told you

That

DAMN

You mean so much.

You say your not letting go

Then I am not either

I have compromised

Everything

Including feelings that sweats out side my flesh

Torturing my chest

Put your arms around me

Say you need me

Ask me if I want you

I tell you I will never leave you

Say to me

Baby I breath you

As I say to you that you’re my allergies

I love sneeze you

The distance is far away

Ask me if our dreams are meant to come true

Feel my head

I am burning up

In temperatures over 100

Needing

Y

O

U

.

.

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© Julia L. Clark Registration Number TXu-331-190, All rights reserved

Author notes

~ Burning Up ~
fever of agony and love
the answer" Darell "

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  • Xx Secrets xX
    January 31, 2008
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    Great write! I enjoyed this piece. Good luck in my contest


  • Lick On Her1275
    October 22, 2007

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    wow i never read such great metaphors of heat and love i think this was a nice answer to your husbands answer
    wow!


  • Swan song gold member
    October 20, 2007

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    Awesome a true breath of full lust and so sensual!
    This was a very huingry poem and a joy to read.


  • Whenitefallz
    October 10, 2007

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    Whaddya mean cracking my ribs open like that?! I'm telling you, you and miss epiphany are killin' me here!
    Hted remembering this emotion - but it hurt so good..
    Fan-damn-tastic stuff!!


  • crushed
    October 10, 2007

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    Hmm...

    I liked the way you worded things. I have not seen metaphors quite like yours. Interesting write. Good luck and thank you for entering my contest.

    -crushed


  • onesugar gold member
    October 9, 2007
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    Amazing and beautifully worded

    Love this Julia

    Love ya ~sugar~

  • almostgone
    October 9, 2007

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    So sweet. There is definitely another side to you my dear. Great job with the bronze, but definitely deserved higher.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    October 8, 2007

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    Oh this is soo good.
    Very original... even if I cant see the picture. The words spell it out.



    delila


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    This was a powerful piece my friend.
    Awesome job. Exactly know about that fe ver going on only one sure cure. You did well here. It captivated me from title through emotions.
    Bravo.

    Tory


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 8, 2007
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    No honey it not showing for me either


  • darell
    October 8, 2007

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    I love you!

    Words of refreshment to your sweltering love
    I'm pouring out oceans of emotions that all
    say I need you and want you in the worst way.
    Let the streams of passion cascade all over
    your hinnie of sultry needs. Open up your
    parched soul and drink my male seed.
    I am your ever lover forever my sweet sister.
    What can I say. Bathe with me in the lakes
    of I LOVE YOU!


  • tomisb
    October 8, 2007

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    the ache is self evident, the medication clear. How come the doctor isn't makeing sure that you are properly dosed?

    Love, Tom B.


    • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
      October 8, 2007
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      i dont know Tom i may need another physician
      thanks for comming by for entertainment

      jewels


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 8, 2007

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    Just DAMN...................................

    This was amazing....
    just what I wanted for this contest and written with absulute perfection.......
    this is how I am feeling right now and it was worded beautifully with so much emotion...
    and with clever metaphors too!
    you go girl... always slammin these down like this!!!
    i love you!!!
    YOU ARE MOST DEFINATELY IN MY FINALIST LIST NOW!!!!!
    -----------------------------------------------
    THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING THIS WONDERFUL PIECE INTO MY CONTEST!!!!!!!-----
    WISHING YOU MUCH LOVE----
    AND GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    XxLisaJazminexX

    __________________________________________________________________


  • kennethlaney
    October 8, 2007
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    Very Deep Poetry!

    Very nice dearest,
    "BOO"


    • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
      October 8, 2007
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      like the new pic excellent thanks hon for being entertained by me

      mrs red book of love


      • kennethlaney
        October 9, 2007
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        Still no picture baby, E-mail it to me. Something else to remember you by.


  • Ephiphany
    October 8, 2007

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    awwwww

    Fabulous answer
    Im speechless and emotional

    • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
      October 8, 2007
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      LMAO! i knew you would love it i think you stepped inside of me when i typed this as you would write something so emotional thanks honey


  • MahoganyFlow
    October 8, 2007

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    AWW! This was wonderful!!! I can relate so much. You did real good with expressing your emotions in this. This was very creative...Keep Writing!!!


  • ellipsist
    October 8, 2007
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    I like this... I like the way the need

    is expressed in such a physical and relatable manner...


  • TwiztidMaggot
    October 8, 2007

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    Wow this is really good. This is kind of like me and Cory... only, he's going to be leaving this weekend for Waverly... which is like four hours away from here... I'm going to miss him so much... and I'm about ready to slap some sense into his mom... because she's wanting to move BACK in with the man she was told by the JUDGE to NOT LIVE WITH and GET A DIVORCE FROM! they both even agreed with it... so, wtf?! now they are wanting to live together again? (I give it about... let me think... a month...) but yeah, anywhoo, this is a wonderful peice of art you have here! keep up your amazing work!

    Crimson


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    October 8, 2007

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    Simply beautiful! I love the style that
    you write in. It's very unique and well
    crafted. The imagery in here is great!
    Sometimes love has a way of playing with
    your emotions and arousing your illnesses.
    Well done and good luck to you with this
    one my friend!




    Jeremy0826

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