You say you love me,
So if I asked would you let me inside your soul?
Give me the key to your heart, take a chance and risk losing control.
Would you?
You say you love me,
So if I hurt you would you forgive me?
Still treasure me and love me unconditionally.
Would you?
Would you trust me?
If I lied would you get over it?
Could you still be with me and honestly commit?
I believe I love you,
But am skeptical of this emotion of which I speak
It seems, love lowers our standards and all-round makes us weak
So if you really love me, than I would have the power to dissect your world
Are you really willing to let your heart be unfurled?
I am not
And for that I am sorry.
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Am seriously looking for some opinions on this one good or bad. I am interseted how interpreted this peice and what you thought in general.
thanks
Falon
I would like to hear your interpretation
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good
very well written mmmmm not sure what else to say about this one!!!!!!
adam
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hey sis long time no talk
I hope everything has been fine. Well what to say about this piece hmm. ???
Terrible...NO NO NO of course not its simply another great piece by yourself. I love how you stuctured this "love lowers our standards and all-round makes us weak" i truly believe what you said with this. I like the twist at the end when you pretty much ask them would you do all this for me, but ur sorry you cant return it. I loved it great work love ya xoxoxox
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I interpret this as hella painful on your part ((if this is true))
I've asked this many times too, and found the answer is always coming from my own heart!
Well done, I liked this, and i could feel your pain!
Keep up the great writes!
♥ Unity
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i thought it was great. loads of emotion in it. love the repetition of "would you" you're really making it personal and questioning the person you refer to. i like how you ask all those questions which are directed to the other person and then answer it yourself at the end.
well written indeed
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This poem has a great depth of emotion, by reading this poem it makes me want to read more of your work, just from this poem you sound like a excellent poet, but with this poem my favorite part was "Would you trust me?
If I lied would you get over it?
Could you still be with me and honestly commit?" Because some times it really is hard for someone to forgive you especially your love, well depending on the type of lie or so on, but this was a great write, can't wait to read your other work, best wishes, michael
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