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Hope fades

Amid the ups and downs,

the twists and turns,

there you were.

 

My light

amid the darkness

that strangled my soul,

sucking every ounce of life

from my core 

 

My hope

amongst the fears

that threatened to engulf my sanity.

 

My shelter

from the reality of life. 

 

Clinging to you with hopes

for better days to come.

 

The child within my womb.

 

Never brought to life 

 

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Option 2 Death of a loved one. Forever dreaming

It's four years today since my unborn daughter Chloe was pronounced dead in my womb after a violent attack by her father and I am struggling to find the words to describe how I am feeling.

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  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 6

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    I am sorry and very saddend to hear about your loss of your precious child. Being a mother myself, I understand how you must be feeling. But I also know that no words can really help heal your pain and sorrow. It takes time, and they say writing therapeutic poetry helps, but I'm not so sure. At any rate, it took a lot of courage for you to post this personal story of yours. Let's all hope and pray that the violent predators in this world are all brought to justice in the end. It's a real shame that this horrific act happened to you. Peace and blessings to you, and you take care...
    Peace,
    Cyn


  • angelli803
    February 4
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    breathless...

    i know this feeling all too well (hence my poem, "Standing Ovation")... there is light at the end... there are brighter days to come, as long as you believe and accept the possibilities of more.
    cheesy and routine this may sound, but i promise, stay open my dear,
    for judging by your poetry, you are brilliant and deserve much more than life has previously dealt you...
    love and happiness,
    angie


  • tazialauren555
    March 19, 2008
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    wow,
    this is very nice and touchy.
    if you knoew what i mean.
    but i really admire your effort and work you put into this i like the way you orginized your poem and its very thoughtful!
    nice work!
    keep them coming and ill keep supporting!
    Love Tazia!


  • Smirnoff Ice
    February 13, 2008

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    this is so sad such a personal piece so well written full of emotion .well done with this thought provoking piece


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    Oh my

    So heartfelt I cannot comprehend how you must have been feeling at that tragic time.
    No comfort can be sort, but I hope the so called Father got his just deserves.
    Hugs to you and your little Angel in heaven xx

  • Judith Chandler
    October 11, 2007
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    that is so sad

    you are brave to attempt to write about it.

  • HarneetKaur
    October 8, 2007

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    Very painful, touchy and shattering. I wish I could ease your pain. But hope never fades, better days will come if lost something u have more to get. All the Best!


  • VirginiaDarling
    October 8, 2007

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    Aww, I'm so sorry for your loss. I think you done a wonderful job in telling the way you feel. It was a pleasure to read your feelings. Keep up the good writeing.


  • follettvogue
    October 8, 2007

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    poignant but the raw thoughts.

    sad but a poem that evokes your inner thoughts and also brings it to the surface for you to get out what you are feeling about this sad event , love paula buckenham


  • bunnyboo1993
    October 8, 2007

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    Aww this is just a touching piece, you just take your time on finding those words to discribe how you feel this is a big emotional lose for you, it will take time. But you will always know even stranger like me are here for you to help you heal as much as it can.

    Great piece, i really loved.

    Good luck with the future. x

  • samii4u
    October 8, 2007

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    i have always believed that pain can often help make good poetry and good poetry can help put pain into words and help relieve it a little. This is a great example of words coming straight from the heart, writing it as you feel it. its raw emotion and bravery for having the strength and courage to write about it. I think you have done a wonderful job on this well done and i am so sorry to hear that it came from such terrible circumstances, i wish you all the best in the future and hope that you will be able to find something happier to write about in the future.


  • RezLife
    October 8, 2007

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    Very sad

    This is a terribly sad story. I'm so sorry you had to experience this, you must be a very strong person, my love to you for makin it girl. I loved this poem from the start, from the title actually. and how the person was built up and then became the one who "strangled my soul, scuking every ounce of my life from my core" now that I understand where the inspiration comes from, that line is really powerful, strong, and sad. The ending is fitting for this poem. Again, sorry to hear of this situation.


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk gold member
    October 8, 2007
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    i thought it was great, totally heartfelt. i think some of the best stuff is written when we have to get things out of our system because its pretty much raw emotion. and im so sorry you had to go through that, it must be hard.

    well done though.x


  • BabyGurlz
    October 8, 2007
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    i love this poem kept it up hu

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