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Fell




Clutching hands
with innocence
(a newborn
stumbling through
obstacles),
because when
tripping on clouds,
I think I fell
for an angel.





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I know it's 21 words, but I fear if I take out one more word it may crumble. But if you say I have to, I will.

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  • Lady Eventide
    October 13, 2007

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    Wow. Nice. I loved the part about falling for an angel. As for the twenty-one word thing, you could change "newborn stumbles through obstacles," which gets rid of the article before newborn. Great job, still. Loved it.


  • Asfand
    October 9, 2007
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    How deep ~


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 8, 2007
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    Beautiful

    Such a good take on the prompt, very hard to do in 20 words. Best of luck in the contest.