Mixed emotions fog my thinking
I find myself lost in delusion
reality being out of reach
Seeking a place of forgiveness
My happiness being the rain
blending with my tears
Author notes
Prompt: I'm only happy when it rains
A contest entry
- Quickie: Paying it Forward by PerfectImperfection.
550 points, ended October 7, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Awesomely done, my friend
The emotions just spill forth from your page
Congrats on the HM...well done, sweetie!
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This reminds me of a story I once read. Rain is so refreshing, both physically and in its metaphorical meaning of a new start. Great write and congrats on the HM.
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I like this piece. Congrats on the trophy. It truly deserves it.
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awwwww very nice and the depth is felt way over here.know about the tears. all the best. congrats on the hm.
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My happiness being the rain
blending with my tears
Indeed you have a beauty in your heart like a innocent butterfly..well done..
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congrats again!
on another award! not that i'm surprised u r T.A.L.E.N.T.E.D.!
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this was a beautiful take on the picture really creating the depth and emotions needed to bring it to life well done and congrats on the honary
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This one really reminded me of how we often get in that spot of hurt and longing and we allow ourselves to linger there so long that it becomes our comfort zone--a twisted sort of happiness, if you want to call it that, that clearly is the evidence of the fogged thinking you speak of--so far from truth, and reality.
Anyway, this was a lovely poem. Thanks so much for sharing from your heart.
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That's crazy, I have been in this exact situation before. A time where I am strugling to let go of a piece of me that has become obsolete to my life. A sort of crossroads where happiness mingles with the sadness of what I thought once was. An absolutely touching poem. Strong imagery with the tears being blended with the rain. As if not quite ready to let them be washed away. Thank you for reminding me of all the blessings in my life and a moment to check my own reality.
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Tis is very lovely
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So sad, such longing!! Beautiful write!! Good luck in the contest!
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Oh, this is so emotional. Your metaphors are fabulous.
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Nice take on the prompt. Bootieful
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Lovely take on the prompt here. Thank you so much for your entry!
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