Loud and clear I hear his voice,
telling mom it's all her choice.
It won't be murder to end my life,
while toying with his surgical knife.
As dollar signs light up his eyes,
he fills her head with devilish lies.
"According to law it's just a fetus,
a brain is needed to fully complete us."
With mortal fear I kick her side,
don't let him take you for a ride!
You don't know the pain I'll feel,
from this decision your heart won't heal.
With gentle hands on my home,
I wish I could stay inside your dome.
Protected from this evil earth,
but it's God's will you must give birth.
You're crying now sounding confused,
my right to life has been abused.
"Let's do it now" I hear you say,
Bowing my head I begin to pray.
Oh God above please let her know,
no matter what I still love her so.
And even if I have to die,
I'll be with you above the sky.
Doctor says "You've made the right choice,
as the fetus within has no voice.
It'll soon be over and end your strife,
you'll once again get on with life."
In one last effort to make her aware,
of the life she's carried within her care.
My final hope she won't follow through,
Just make him explain the procedure to you.
"I want the details play by play,
before I sign this life away".
Hearing her words I prepare to fight,
kicking and squirming with all of my might.
Her heart pounds loudly from horrors heard,
walking out of the room she says not a word.
Ashamed and sobbing at what almost took place,
toward the exit she headed as if running a race.
Doc shouts behind "Don't let emotions rule,
it's not like your carrying a precious jewel."
"This is a baby!and I'll be the voice,
the taking of life is only God's choice".
"What gives you the right to try and deceive?
Not knowing or caring the scars it will leave."
Be ready to answer for this chosen path,
Slaughtering of innocence,you'll endure God's wrath".
I was born exactly a month to that date,
when Satan tried desparately to seal my fate.
Mom holding me close with such a loving glance,
I was so glad we both got this second chance.
Author notes
OPTION#5.{ABORTION] THIS IS A POEM ABOUT PARTIAL BIRTH ABORTION WHERE A BABY'S LIFE IS TERMINATED DURING THE LAST TRIMESTER OF PREGNANCY. THE NAME WAS CHANGED TO "LATE TERM ABORTION" IN ORDER TO TONE DOWN THE TRUTH OF HOW THE PROCEDURE IS PERFORMED. IF YOU ARE INTERESTED IN THE TRUTH I AM SURE YOU CAN GOOGLE {PARTIAL BIRTH ABORTION} AND READ JUST WHAT REALLY HAPPENS DURING THIS HORRIFIC VIIOLATION OF A HUMAN LIFE.
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This is very sad. Just the thought that life could be terminated before it even begins haunts me for me, and I will let those who make this choice be haunted for themselves. I am against abortion for me that is evident, I gave birth to four children, one that even threatened my life. But I chose to go thought with it, and suffered five months bed rest to insure my safety and his. But I do not suggest that the way I choose to set my life is good for all. I believe that women should be given the choice to choose. They must answer to God for their decisions as I must in other areas of my life where I made a wrong decision. I feel the pain of these words and coming from the point of view of the fetus, this is indeed a powerful work of words. Congratulations on your Gold trophy win. This tear-jerking is worthy!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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THis is so powerful and flowing and emotive, it draws the reader in and makes them really think about the child inside.IT's amazing.
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Women grieve these children, they do not expect to but they do. Abortion helps no one. like every short fix, easy way out it solves nothing. I have seen so much in the years working L/D and teaching Lamaze . I read through the comments about ethic boards and what physicians will and will not do. The thing is women will lie they do it every day. also they do not seek prenatal care. many abortions are preformed by physicians who do not know the patient . For example a patient comes in swallowed 100 aspirin in attempt to do a late term abort she is bleeding what choice does the physician have? Because I will tell you this if he delivers two premature babies instead of following her wishes she will sue him for custodial care of those children and the poor health they are in. and if a physician turns her away she will bleed to death. Things get murky and women do very bad things to themselves and they're babies sometimes. These things happen more then you would like to think. education, Jesus and Love.
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wow Toni, I've never read a more empowering write about the "a" word!!! I do believe you have covered all the issues on this subject and you have done it with expertise girl!!! this write should be read by all young mothers with a doubt whether to let their baby live or end it's life.
awesome!!!
love
Mary
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Such a powerful write Toni. Bastards that kill children as fetus are evil. A fetus is a child from the moment of conception. Had a friend's daughter that went through this but she also ran out the door at the last moment realizing it was murder to her child. The baby is a healthly little 5 month old full of life.
Brian
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SO POWERFUL!!!
Toni, this is without a doubt one of THE MOST powerful poems I have EVER read! You have really written a masterpiece here! This speaks SO LOUDLY AND FORCEFULLY as a voice against the hideous crime of ABORTION! God bless you for having the guts to speak up on behalf of the unborn! Sadly, in our day, the most dangerous place for a child is what SHOULD be the safest: its MOTHER'S WOMB! Great write!!! Bravo!!!
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well what do i think im humbled by your love for the unborn so true are your words that a lump in my throat you are truely gifted if there were more people like you we wouldnt have to worry your right the devil is playing his ace so many nieve woman are having abortions are being forved to have them if they only seen what happens to the babies they might change there minds
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berautiful and quite descriptive feel of your attempt.....well done..and thanks for sharing such a wonderful piece...
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This is a very powerful write and the still silent voice is overlooked and treated as if it doesn't qualify to live. I could never have an abortion....God made the new being inside it's mother to be and only he should have the right to take the child back home. Thanks for sharing these!
BLESSINGS, Doris
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Yes Love This Is A Golden Write Here
This poem is so stong in which our beliefs are. I hope as I've said before that many will come to read this increadible poem. Very well expressed and yes it is so sad.
Love you
Kelle Marie
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wow beautiful write. i am speechless. this was so brilliant and i could just see that baby squirming inside her. great job. i beleive i have found my gold winner!
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Wow! its such a powerfull poem and yet beautiful it tells how horrible abortion can be you did a darn good job and you have a gift for writing I've been writing most of my life and I can tell a gift when I see it you have it. Most writers who write write for years and not get to this level but you deff have it.. You should be appoladed for taking on a subject that's this hard most poets wont even touch this subject.. Great job..
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OH WOW!!!! This took my breath away!!! I pray that this amazing poem will touch many expecting mothers before they make the wrong decision.
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Excellent!
Sorry, my comp decided to throw a fit as I was making the comment. Excellent work! The voice of the child has been heard loud and clear! I love this poem!!! I have never understood how anyone could take the life of a child, especially in this grotesque manner. It is out and out cold blooded murder! I am glad that you have spoken out about this and been a voice for those who can't speak for themselves! Keep the ink flowing and thank you for this poem!
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You are right...I used to work in a Christian Crisis Pregnancy Center and I've read about PBA...it vile and wicked and evil and disgusting. When I read the procedure to pregnant women, there was never a dry eye. I can only imagine the hard heart of one with the guts to go through with this procedure. I loved your poem. I felt myself hoping the child would survive, I teared up. Wow!!! Thanks for spreading the truth in the face of the lie of "choice."
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Airee!! There is so much deception in the world but the bottom line is abortion is an accepted murder of convenience and the one who pays the ultimate price has no say in the decision. The baby did not ask to be conceived, the baby did not molest or rape the mother and contrary to what people say GOD can create flowers out of the most gosh awful mess. I've seen HIM do it. The worse smelling manuer produces the best plants. So how can we say even in the worse scenario where a woman is raped, that the child isn't a blessing waiting to be born so he or she can heal the mother and bless the world.
I am sooooo glad you wrote this.
One Love,
John
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This was absolutely spellbounding. Your words held me to the end. To see that a baby was born in the end made my heart leap for joy. You held me to the end. Excellent write. Papagallo
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piercing and bold...truly touching our souls.
well done dear poetess, well done.
thankyou for writing for those whose voice is ...gone.
ears/Seattle
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Excellent
A very good write indeed. You expressed your self very well. By the way,there is a web site: Gospel Hymn Stories, on which I found the lyrics for the Christian Hymn: Almost Persuaded, by any chance was this the inspiration for your poem. If so, you choose a very good hymn.
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This is an incredible bit of work on your part and the accolades from the readers have been phenomenal. There seems to be somm interest in some lines that were required to be deleted. Are those lines not in the version I just read or were they reintroduced due to public outcry. If there is more to this piece I would like to know and will probably voice my opinions to the controlling forces of this site. Perhaps there are personal reasons why some lines were to be excluding, ...very telling, isn't it. If you should have the time it would be greatly appreciated if you would go to my homepage and read, "Intersection". I was not asked to edit. If you understand this piece you will see why it could have been. It is on the same platform as yours, but taken from another angle. Your piece is brilliant and I am glad it is gaining so much exposure. RC
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Oh I agree!
And i am pro choice....my base would call me a lacky but this goes to far...its like a horror movie.
If you cant make up your mind in 2 mn....i dont know....i know men should not make laws for this...it is a women's issue.....i dont see how a man should influence what ever side he takes......it should be just a woman's vote....
Well this got me Irish up lassie......
Your point was made with elegance and emotion...the entire angle in which it was presented was done in an extremely cleaver way.
BLESSING ALWAYS,
LOWELL POE.
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Excellent
Wow this is such a powerful poem Toni. You did an excellent job in preserving and explaining the emotions that take place when a young woman is contemplating abortion. I'm so glad you wrote this for all to see. You are RIGHT, we don't have the right to take anothers life. I've heard from more hurting woman many of years later that had had abortions when they were younger and despairingly regretted what they had done, sacrificing their daughter or son. Only God in Heaven has the right to give life or take it away, for he is our creator. Excellent, and the ryhme is perfect!!! You are an excellent poet of speaking the truth about life and the spiritual realm of our Lord in which we all battle with each and every day. Thank God he lets us come to him for saving our souls and the sin we committ on a daily basis. I just love you, God even loves you more!! Thank you for exhaulting our Lord dear sweet Toni.
Much Love My Dear Friend
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Excellent Composition and very well written and versed with great flow----Well Done
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Oh wow! This is so well written! Clever as well. You put this tragedy out there and you did it in a way that makes the reader understand the perspective of a life that seldom gets lent a voice! Bravo to you!
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THe rhyming is maddening.
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I Can Only Assume...
by your comment or lack thereof, this contest is primarily geared to the pro-abortions, etc rights. so I will remove my entry...
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Amen to this write
I have never understood why anyone would want to kill a sweet baby when their are thousands of people in the world who would love that baby as their own . The respeonsible thing to do if yopu think you are adult enough to have sex is to make that decision to take birth control before the child is conceived .This way you can destroy your soul without bringing another living being into your life . You can make the decision to not have children and get your tubes tied until you grow up because today if your the typw that has multiple [artners and having unsafe sex then you are more likely to die of aids also leaving the child behind without a mother or a father . Its a Sick world we live in today so save a child and get yourself fixed before you have sex.
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The right to chose - a woman's right to become pregnant, her right to terminate the pregnancy too. You have taken the side of the unborn baby and made a good reason for not having an abortion. Sentiments well expressed in these lines - tough choice for some to make, but one they must live with for the rest of their lives. There are other forms of birth control that happen before this choice need be made. Takes two to tango, but only one to prevent a pregnancy from beginning. Both can make that decision as well.
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I'm amazed!
This is a horrid procedure that needs to be outlawed. Thank you for writing this poem and showing the view from the Baby's perspective! God Bless!
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A fitting tribute to the need for birth control. If only the choice were that simple. Good write though poignant and thoughtful. Happy trails
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wow
your flow and rhyme are perfect..your viewpoint from the baby's mind is unique..it is a horrible atrocity..in Victorian times they used to have the baby and leave it in a room unattended..what monsters are we?..thank you for sharing this powerful write..poems should make you think..challenge you...this one does..excellent..best of luck in the contest..
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Great poem. I liked the way you told the story from the baby's viewpoint. Glad it had a happy ending.
alby
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nice
great poem..so true
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you have really touched something close to my heart. and written so beautifully wish this was published and put up every where.
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This an amazing poem and I completely agree with you in the fact it's wrong. One of my best friends almost wasn't here today because of abortion, but her mom didn't go through with is. This is an amazingly powerful write and I love it. Wonderful!
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Prophetic Wisdom, Expression....
This is an incredible piece...
Lo-Amo!!!
Salute!!!
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oh wow this is a great write but a terrible thing that almost happened to you. God was with you. I wish you well
I was going to ask if you had a suction mark on your head, but that would not be nice
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Goosebumps
Your writing, I believe, is directly from His throne. I can feel God's. anointing all over it. This is truly wonderful.
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Of poems giving voice to the unborn baby, this is one fo the better ones I have read. For the most part, the rhyme enhances the poem and is usually not forced (though "towards the exit she headed as if running a race" is a bit awkward) As much as I appreciate the pro-life message of this poem, I feel it may be simplifying the issue. The woman's feelings about her abortion seem more in keeping with an earlier termination. While it is not true, as many pro-choice groups assert, that this type of abortion is always done on deformed or terminally sick fetuses, a woman waiting this long to have one is often facing more serious issues than simply choosing not to have the baby. (BY the way, I may make reference to a paper by Dr. Martin Haskell, who is one of the only doctor's in the country to openly discuss the thousands of D&X or partial birth abortions he has performed (and with Dr. Carhart, one of the chief people doing them.) In this paper, he asserts that only 20% of the second-trimester partial birth abortions he does are for health reasons.)
I do not know if you are familiar with the "Partial Birth Abortion Trials" in which abortion providers testified about the procedure. There was quite a bit of tetimony about practitioners holding back details of the procedure from prospective patients. Check out http://www.clinicquotes.com go to the quotes section and check out the transcripts.
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this was really really good. i've always been confused on how i felt about abortion, i've just never been sure what i would do if i was in a situation where i thought of getting one. but now i think i never will. thankyou for writing such a great poem, it really changed my mind!!
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Frightening...
… to think about what a baby might say. I think you must have hit a very sensitive nerve with whoever reported you to the AP Policy Board. The ‘tolerance bar’ here at AP seems to be set so high that I can’t imagine why they asked you to tone this down. Warm regards, Sultan
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A fantastic poem. You've said it well and we have to remember: "Behold, children are a heritage from the LORD, the fruit of the womb is a reward" (Psalm 127:3)
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Can you please mail me the entire poem...along with the 2 "censored" stanzas. I'll IM you my e-mail id.
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Hi Toni -
I read all the comments on the poem - and they all liked it - except for one - It's a controversial poem for sure - something like some of mine are - if you have to change something - that is fine - as long as the message gets through - Bless God - Joe -
Amazing
awesome...those 2 stanzas they removed certainly added more to it, and should not have been edited. If people are allowed to talk about sex with more extreme detail than that, then it shouldn't have been removed. But it was a good poem...probably would have made more sense if the kid were born like 8 months later or something, cause 1 month doesn't really fit reality, but totally awesome write! Keep up the awesome writing!
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The reason the baby was born 1 month later is because a partial birth abortion occurs during the last trimester of pregnancy so the baby's life is usually terminated in the seventh eighth or even the ninth month.but thanks for your kind coments...Toni
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I like this poem a lot and I find nothing wrong with it.
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The device of writing from the baby's point of view is a good one.
It would be good to explain why this very loving woman is considering having an abortion when she is eight months pregnant. It would make this piece more real.
As it is, it is presented like it is a mere caprice on her part (there are no medical reasons for this eight-month abortion? Then why did she wait so long, never mind that if there were no medical reasons for it she would never be offered the option to abort) and the doctor is presented as an evil mercenary.
These late-term abortions are extremely rare, never taken as lightly as you have presented it, and as far as I know are only done when the choice is a matter of life or death for the woman.
So for those reasons, this piece just didn't feel real to me.
p.s. I read this poem because of the post on the Policy board. I saw the original stanzas 10 and 11 and have NO idea why they required you to edit them. I have read far worse "disturbing" things on this site.
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This is a very good poem about abortion. It is very clear and a voice for those who have no voice. Great job. I hope many read and understand the damage to both the child and the mother. Thanks for sharing. Melody
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Very powerful,VERY TRUE.I LOVED EVERY LINE!
"This baby, not a fetus does have a voice,
the taking of life should be only GOD'S choice!"
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I am in awe
Only a women & a mother could write such a powerful piece. I stand & say bravo for telling it like is is. Liberals be damned
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A POWERFUL PIECE
kudo's for speaking out the imagery was pwerful and your usse of poetic verse was perfact well done and thank you for sharing it from one right to lifer to another -
A POWERFUL PIECE
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omg wow this was so sad I almost cried I thought she would actually ge tthe abortion. It sounded as if the doctor didn't care, he only wanted the money. If I had a teenage pregnancy, I would have the baby but if I couldn't take care of it give it to a family member until I got older. I can see from the ending the mom was happy with her new choice. If I had an abortion, I would have been sobbing for the rest of my life.
As LadyUnique said, if you don't want a baby, don't have sex. Great write! I loved it.
~Pandy~
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I am always shocked that some women want other women to bear children they don't want. Why not just mind your own business?
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I read your comment
Your name tells it all
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SUPERB
I love someone who is blunt and tells it like it is. Just like me! This is such a sad, but true piece you have came up with. I have 2 grandchildren, 1 just 7 months old, I cringe at the thought of someone trying to talk one of my girls into this gruesome, chicken shit way out for people who become pg. If they can't stand the heat, then stay the hell out of the damn kitchen. JESUS LOVES THE LITTLE CHILDREN!
GREAT WRITE.
POETDONTKNOWIT
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you've made abortion much more personal with your words and writing from the baby's perspective. you are the voice of the unborn. to end the poem saying you were almost an abortion kinda grabs the gut. very cleverly done in good rhyme too.
I chose not to have children and don't regret my choice. Had I ever become pregnant I truly believe I would have had the child. I do realize there are conditions where abortion seems to be the best answer.
bottom line is if you don't want to have a baby then don't have sex.
solid write
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Horriable
OMG you wrote an amazeing poem. I love how you made the rhyming flow so well. This is so tragic, I am against abortion 100%, I think its the worst thing a person can do. Keep up the great writeing.
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Gripping! So Very Honestly Spoken, and Given in the Light of the Truth!
You have spoken into my heart, and faith... Bless you for this, and so glad I am, that you were born, so to write, and let the world hear this!
~ James ~
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I'm carrying my first child and could never, ever do such a terrible thing.
This not only has a emotional message, but you've done an excellent job telling it from an otherwise unknown perspective. Wonderful, wonderful work.
The only time I have ever agreed with abortion is when its a life/death situation. As I'm not religious, I don't see what God and the Devil have to do with it, its a matter of parental love. You show that love exceptionally well.
Excellent work.
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SWEET, DARK, TRUTHFUL, ENLIGHTENING, AND PERSUASIVE.
Abortion truly is murder. We pretty much have legalized genocide! May GOD pursuade more moms to turn away from murder and back to LOVE -
It's a well written peice of work, though I dissagree with your views, however I don't know what country you're writting this from. In my country, late term abortions are only allowed if the child's birth will harm the mother, and has to be approved by an ethics board. Also, doctors perform medcine to help people, and as doctors they care for the humans that they look after. There would be no doctor that would not inform a mother, or in cases a mothers carer, what the proceedure intails, as patients have to sign a consent form.
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I'm speechless, infact i could feel my eyes getting a little watery as i read. Such amazing brutal descriptions and yet you still made it rhyme and flow perfectly. And what a great idea to have it comming from the unborn baby's perspective, makes the whole thing more serious, makes the act seem even more brutal, which i completely agree it is anyway. It was almost unbareable to continue reading incase she did decide to terminate. I felt so sorry for the baby and at the same time anxious and upset, i could feel what the baby would be feeling, a kind of sick feeling in the stomach. This truly is an amazing piece! I intend to tell my friends to have a look at this.
Well done again! And by the way i am also against abortion, and until i read this i was unaware of this procedure you describe so graphically.
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This is a great poem indeed. However I am unaware that "late term abortion" is something that most doctors would perform unless for some reason the life of the Mother and /or baby are at terrible risk, and I also do not think that most mothers to be would opt to have such performed under any circumstances other than a life or death situation. In such a case I believe society has to become more tolerant [as many times the mother has other children to care for and taking the risk to die in childbirth could leave those children at the merci of fate [which many times means them becoming wards of the state]<------that is not a fate I would want to befall on any child [I worked with plenty of such victims]yes , they can be considered VICTIMS in such a case as well----for it many times means being shuffled from one foster home to another and never really belonging to anyone. I am not making a pro-abortion case here...but I think it would have to be considered on an individual basis if it is a LATE term abortion,
regards and respect,
reenie
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It's horrifying to hear about but it must be told. Maybe more will run away if they know what really happens to the child (as well as the mother). Call it what you want but God calls it murder.
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This was so inspiring to all potential mothers out there
that hopefully if they read this poem, they wouldnt even think of having an abortion.....
this needs to be told and it abortion needs to stop...
saying that a fetus isnt a life such bull****
it is a life progressing....
this poem was a masterpiece!!!!
even the rhyme throughout each line was awesome... sad of course but so full of truth and with a happy ending...
if only all storys in abortion offices around the globe had the same outcome.....
this kept my attention the whole way through as i'm sure it did to all the other reader hat had the pleasure of reading it also....
excellent!
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God bless you and this poem, this poem was very sad to me, but in the end it too me turned out for the best, it was really an inspiring poem, my favorite part was ""Doc shouting behind "Don't let emotions rule,
it's not like your carrying a precious jewel."
"This baby, not a fetus does have a voice,
the taking of life should be only GOD'S choice!""" that woman has strong will power to leave like that, this poem was a great write, best wishes,God bless you, michael <3
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Let The Little One Live
Hi Toni - I don't usually read poems more than 30 lines but I read this one because it's yours -and the message needs to be told. The word "Fetus" is Latin and translated is "Little One" - I do support the anti-abortion cause - but I also rest assured that these little ones are safe in the arms of Jesus - they are alive forevermore. Bless God Toni - Joe
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a beautiful poem my lady. i bow. but i am a man. i don't have to make the choice. i am sure it can't be easy. but again. this is a beautiful poem. so many women are left alone with no help as the man walks away. i would not. again, i bow to a poem deserving praise.
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Lovely. you made it flow like it`s easy. your poem is very strongly opinionated and it shined through nicely. your a wonderfull poet
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very articulate, very blunt, and in your face. this poem i really enjoyed reading. it has merit and meat, and not some 'fluffy' or 'dark' ramblings of words. also, true to the message i agree with you. this is one that stays with you for sure!
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I liked your poem. Many people would believe that a fetus doesn't have a voice, but I disagree with that. I think God knows who you are way before you are born and doesn't want anyone to die, fetus or maybe even 100 years old.
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