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My Heart

There is so much I want to tell you,
But I can't seem to find the words.
You make the gray skies, my life, blue
I know to you this sounds absurd

But if you could get inside my head
And feel what's in my heart
Without you I am nothing, I'm dead!
I've waited so long for this new start!

So don't turn away when I need you most,
Because I never turn my back on you.
My heart wants nothing more but to host
The miracle I have received, the miracle called you.

You saved me from drowning in my own despair
You gave me a reason to live
My love for you is beyond compare
My Love, my heart is what I have to give

So take my heart and keep it safe
And let no other take its place
But if one day, you love for me goes away
Just know that you will always be in my heart for eternity

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leslielovesthomas - teenagefailure

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  • Arizona Sunset
    November 13, 2007
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    Thank you for sharing, best to you in the contest


  • Gods-Artgal
    November 13, 2007
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    I like this one of yours that is in my contest the best. This is a great poem.


  • teenagefailure
    November 11, 2007
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    There is so much I want to tell you,
    But I can't seem to find the words.
    You make the gray skies, my life, blue
    I know to you this sounds absurd
    Is definitly my favorite part! The emotions in ths is so strong, I can totally feel them!!!

    -Eri Lynn


  • fairytalelovestory
    October 29, 2007
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    beautiful absolutely beautiful


  • XInsanity-FairX
    October 28, 2007

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    this is a sweet poem, full of emotion, and it has a real impact on the reader...

    it's a great poem

    well done

    thanks for entering and good luck

    xxxxx

    XD


  • Anjole-Of-The-Artz
    October 25, 2007
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    xD

    Really sweet but a bit cliche..thank you for the nice write/entry =] <333 good luck in the contest

  • Purple-Meow
    October 23, 2007
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    nice but can u please try to give other ppl a try thanks anyway


  • Trixie08
    October 23, 2007
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    I feel your pain I remember when I've felt like that. You captured a broken heart perfectly.


  • shutter-bug
    October 17, 2007

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    aww, how sweet!! this was wonderfully written. i like the second and fourth stanzas the best, but over-all, an awesome piece. thank you for entering!!


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 16, 2007
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    That is so sweet. I loved it. I love the last two lines the most.But if one day, you love for me goes away
    Just know that you will always be in my heart for eternity
    That is just so romantic. I loved it. A great this was. I want to thank you for entering and good luck


  • Dlvvanzor
    October 15, 2007
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    That was so sweet. I don't know if you did it on purpose, but on the second to last stanza, last line, you capitolized 'Love.' That was a really nice touch. I also like the theme of loving them even if they don't love you anymore.

    Thanks for entering!
    -Dlvvanzor


  • camus gold member
    October 12, 2007
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    There is so much despair here, even self-doubt about one's own worth. I don't feel that the rhyme scheme helped in this poem since it is so demanding and insistent that an air of being forced emerges. I do see, however, that the love is profound and enduring. What more can a lover ask ?


  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    October 8, 2007
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    Sweet.

    I like it. Pretty deep,and true.

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