stay here with me, tonight
don't leave until there's light
through the windows
and love, when you go
don't say a word
don't make a sound
i want to think that you're still around
there's always tomorrow,
but we're leaving tonight
we'll take a train ride toward the bright
of day, so just lay in my arms,
oh, i'll keep you safe from harm
i'll hold you until morning comes,
until morning comes
let's go to a castle under the sea
fuck the world, it's you and me
nobody close, we're on our own
driving this train two lovers alone
we're bright in the fire, wild and free
in our castle beneath the sea
there's always tomorrow,
but we're leaving tonight
we'll take a train ride toward the bright
of day, just lay in my arms,
oh, i'll keep you safe from harm
i'll hold you until morning comes,
until morning comes
hold my hand and never let go
and we'll be warm through ice and snow
no one but us, the world's stopped turning
be with me until our fire stops burning
lost in love in the summer air
your hand in mine, our future shared
there's always tomorrow,
but we're leaving tonight
we'll take a train ride toward the bright
of day, just lay in my arms,
oh, i'll keep you safe from harm
i'll hold you until morning comes,
until morning comes
Author notes
I've never written lyrics before, so I'm sort of wondering if these are okay or not. It was really hard for me.
Option 3
A contest entry
- GOOD CHARLOTTE INSPIRED by Mad As Rabbits.
550 points, ended February 12, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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Out of all of the lyrics I've read in this contest, yours definitely are the best. Awesome for the first time. The rhyme here just kind of adds to the mood and the piece, not like others that center their poem around rhyme, I HATE that!!! This is definitely a song, too, with a chorus and everything. Some people seem to forget that. Anyway, this was beautiful, thanks for sharing it with me!
Thanks for entering.
Love Always,
Caroline
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I liked this!
I really could feel the beat in this piece and I enjoyed it very much. In my opinion and its just an opinion the use of "fuck" takes away from a bit, but otherwise it's is a great piece.
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Yeah, I debated the use of it, but I wasn't sure of any other word to use. But thank you very much for the applause!!
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it depends on what kind of music you put it too. i mean..everyperson in the world can understand and relate to these lyrics. because every person wishes to have a second half. if you were to re-write this poem i would SUGGest more specific instead of being so figurative. most of america is dumb, and if you speak in cliche's..idk, sounds like what i hear everyday..
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It was really good. I liked it. I could see it being a song. Great job. This is the first "lyrics" I have seen. Really good. Hit my heart. lol
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This was wonderful. I could hear the sad longing singing in my head as I read this. It definitely has a lyrical rythem. great job and great piece.
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These are really good lyrics I really like the rythym and flow to these words... I would definately pay to hear this as a song
Thank you for sharing, and be blessed
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