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Above and Beyond

Missing image
Clouded thoughts
drift within
               the symphony
of time

rising upward
into the hand
that sings my life

taking me home...

A contest entry

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  • Lady Eventide
    October 13, 2007

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    Wow. I loved how a few parts of this seemed to fly, like birds or something, and then you took off into the air with the last line. Great job on bronze.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    October 12, 2007

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    Gorgeous entry, Donna, just beautiful! Congratulations on the bronze!

    Hey, I just had a thought. What if you used the word "conducting" instead of "taking" to keep your imagery going until the end? "Conducting me home." Double meaning. Obviously, this is a trophy winning piece and is marvelous just how it is, but it was just a thought...

    Anyway, congrats on the contests. Very lovely piece!


  • Asfand
    October 9, 2007
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    Wow ~ exquistie ~


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Lovely write, produced glorious imagery in my mind. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.